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I need feedback on an essay idea where I use driving my car as a metaphor for my drive in life and achieving contentment through hard work. Any advice?

My idea for an essay is about being content with achieving the best grades, and being a good person. The ever-constant drive for the “A” and how “driven” I am about the hard work I put into being the best person I can be in all aspects of my life and how with that comes the sense of accomplishment but I want to use driving my car and the peace I find while driving as a metaphor for the satisfaction I get from working hard not just for my good grades but how that hard work relates to my life in general; that hard work pays off and I can use my “drive” to achieve success to ultimately reach a state of mind in which I am completely content.

I’m one of those people who have a reputation for being rather intense and always striving for perfection but in a funny sort of way. I don't mind working hard but I hold myself to a higher standard. I don't want to settle for less, I want to be the best. I feel most content when I achieve this. It doesn't always happen but I do try.

The one thing that offers a sense of balance to the intensity is when I drive my 5 speed car and listen to music. Its a way to empty my mind and just relax. I thought it would be a creative idea to combine the two.

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"Describe a place or environment where you are perfectly content. What do you do or experience there and why is it meaningful to you..... so that we can get to know you better."

In assisting you to answer this question, there are a few observations that should help you provide the best answer, especially as your assignment is intended to make you better understood. It seems that contentment to you involves your desire to attain perfection - or your version of it- but you have a humility that is often not apparent in perfectionists. That is an important element to focus on. Your metaphorical use of "drive" reveals your ability to think on a broader scale and will allow for a creative interpretation. You are a quick thinker and you care what others think about you which is why you do not want to be misunderstood in your attempts at this essay. Your place in the world is obviously very important to you. You may enjoy your own company or maybe you take others along with you when you drive. However, it seems that you are inspired by wide open spaces.

Being able to glean this from the information you have provided means that you will have no trouble in getting your message across but you must trust yourself and your ability to do so. To get started on a good introduction and thesis statement, use your "drive" metaphor. Consider some ideas like these below:

Contentment can be felt at many different junctions in life insomuch as it represents happiness and a certain fulfillment. However, I would like to think that contentment is actually a journey. A feeling of contentment leads to an opportunity for reflection which, therefore suggests that the journey itself holds the ultimate contentment- for me anyway. Life holds many challenges and always approaching the uphill wondering what lies on the other side is what motivates me. I am a driven individual; results reflect success; hard work culminating in A-grade essays allows me to maintain my speed. I am also a free spirit and the open road reflects the future contentment that keeps me driving myself, metaphorically and literally.

I do not like to be restrictive in my thoughts or my destinations. The more driven I am, the more I achieve, the more I can dream and the further I can go. It is really important to me to maintain balance in my life because I cannot find satisfaction from achieving good grades if I have nowhere else to go.

In the body of your essay, include some direct references to places that you may encounter along your route. It may be places from your childhood - your granny's home, a favorite holiday destination perhaps or even familiar smells that create a sense of comfort and belonging - as it is important that your essay is focused. This is a good way to get to know you - the places and people who are important to you even though, for you, they are part of the puzzle, part of the journey which is the contentment itself. Remembering places and people definitely reveals something about you and what is important to you.

In conclusion, you may want to revisit your "drive" theme. Relate it to the introduction and how this essay is another "junction" on your contentment roadmap which allows you to have direction and focus.

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