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How can dreams and aspirations positively affect people's lives and relationships?

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To write a great thesis statement, you should look at the evidence you're going to use to support your opinion and then make a statement you can support with that evidence. Each of the paragraphs in the essay should then make a point that supports the thesis. You can include a piece of evidence in each paragraph; make sure you properly cite your sources when you provide outside evidence.

Ask yourself why you think that dreams and aspirations make people happier; once you have an answer, write it down. Next, look for evidence to see if you're right or wrong. If you're right, start writing down the reasons why your answer is true. These reasons might become your body paragraphs. If you're wrong, then adjust your answer to fit the evidence. It's okay for your thesis to change as you do the research—sometimes you learn things and have to adjust your thesis accordingly.

It's important to use evidence to support each paragraph. It's important that each paragraph support the thesis. Your thesis should be a road map for the rest of your paper. Your conclusion should sum up each point you made, restate your overall idea, and say something else about the topic.

A good thesis statement on this topic should look not only at why dreams and aspirations improve relationships but how they do so. One example of a strong thesis is: dreams and aspirations positively impact people's relationships by giving them something to work toward together as well as increasing the happiness of both people individually.

If you used a thesis like this, you'd want to prove that dreams and aspirations bring people happiness as individuals. You'd want to prove that a relationship is improved by two people working together toward a common goal. Finally, you'd want to show that those two things have a positive impact on a relationship.

Your thesis should come at the end of your opening paragraph. Before the thesis, include a few sentences introducing your topic to the reader. For example, you might write about the benefits of happy relationships and lives. Ask yourself what the benefits of these things are. Do they increase the chances of having a family that stays together? Do they increase your chances of having a stable job? Look for interesting facts about personal well-being and strong relationships to get your reader excited about the topic as you lead into your thesis. Then explain that one way to improve your personal well-being and relationships is to have dreams and aspirations. After that, write your thesis statement. That's the end of your opening paragraph.

When you start working on your opening statements for each paragraph in the essay, consider how each one proves your thesis. The first paragraph, for example, might be something like: people are happier when they have concrete dreams and aspirations (Parker, 2014). Then you'd talk about the benefits of concrete dreams and how they make people happier. You can later connect this to happier relationships by making the connection to another study that says one reason people with dreams and aspirations are happier in relationships is that people who celebrate each other's achievements are more likely to be in happy relationships (Gable, Gonzaga, & Strachman, 2006).

Keep in mind that your thesis statement is your point of view and opinion. There is going to be a lot of evidence that is interpreted in different ways on this topic. As long as the evidence supports your opinion, you can argue your point. Someone else might look at the same evidence and come up with a different thesis. Another student might argue that dreams and aspirations make people less happy in relationships because they have to change or compromise for the sake of fulfilling their dreams if they don't align with their partner's dreams. Neither point of view is wrong. Just make sure the evidence you include supports your thesis, and you'll have the beginning of a great argument.

Once you've created a basic thesis, read over it and see if you can make it stronger. If any of your words are vague, look for more specific ones. For example, if you say that dreams make relationships stronger, ask yourself what kinds of relationships you're talking about. Do you mean romantic relationships or all relationships in a person's life? Check the evidence you're using to see which types of relationships they discuss to make your thesis more concrete.

When you're done with your paper, read over the entire thing and make sure it still fits your thesis. If the paper seems strong but the thesis seems weak, you can strengthen it once you're done. There's no harm in refining your thesis throughout the writing process. In fact, the more you work to make your thesis specific, supported by evidence, and correctly worded, the stronger your resulting paper is going to be.

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