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How can I improve the introduction sentence about Willy Loman not being a trustworthy figure in a family?

"We've all heard of 'A family is a haven in a heartless world.' Unfortunately, father of the house, Willy Loman, does not meet the criteria of being trustworthy."

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I think you've got the right idea but that you haven't really made yourself clear. You don't have to say that we've all heard, etc. I think it would be better to say

A family is supposed to be a haven of peace, comfort and security in a heartless world. Unfortunately, Willy Loman, because of his fecklessness and infidelity, fails to uphold his central position as head of the household.

That is just a sort of rough suggestion. I don't know whether you are blaming Willy just for being unfaithful to his wife or whether you are blaming him for being a daydreamer and a poor provider as well. It seems to me that if he were a better provider, his little extramarital affairs wouldn't seem so terrible.

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