Which of the following would be the correct way to write this sentence?1. In reality, the war is nothing like a game and Perry does not realize that the war is not a matter of necessarily winning...

Which of the following would be the correct way to write this sentence?1. In reality, the war is nothing like a game and Perry does not realize that the war is not a matter of necessarily winning or losing. It is about staying alive. (so, I don't combine the 2 sentences) 2. In reality, the war is nothing like a game and Perry does not realize that the war is not a matter of necessarily winning or losing, it is about staying alive. (I combine the 2 sentences)
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pohnpei397 eNotes educator| Certified Educator

I really don't particularly like either of these choices.  But of the two, I would prefer the first.  The second of these choices is really a bit of a run-on.  It has too many ideas.

If I were writing this (going only on what you've said, because I have no idea what you're talking about here) I would say it like this

In reality, the war is nothing like a game.  Although Perry doesn't realize it, war is about staying alive and not about winning or losing.

Or maybe

Perry thinks that war is about winning or losing -- sort of like it's a game.  He is wrong because, in reality, war is about staying alive.

I hope that helps.

 

readerofbooks eNotes educator| Certified Educator

I agree with the previous post. I do not like these sentences at all. They are actually pretty poorly constructed. But if you need to know which one is correct, then I would say that the first one is correct.

The second sentence is a run on sentence. "It is about staying alive" is a complete sentence and you would need some sort of connecting conjunction. Without a connecting conjunction, you would need a period or a semicolon. A comma makes it a run on.

The first sentence is inelegant, especially with the two usage of "not," but it is fine grammatically.