What would be a good thesis for The Tragedy of Julius Caesar to show what Brutus seemed to suggest about the human desire for power (as a theme)?
This what I came up with. Thesis: In The Tragedy of Julius Caesar by William Shakespeare, Marcus Brutus, demonstrates a kind of a person who can go against his friend not because he hates you, but because he loves his country more.
You have a good idea for a paper here, and there are ample examples in the play from which you can draw to support your claims. The one thing that could be altered is the formality of your statement – literary essays are generally considered formal papers, and therefore it is a good idea to eschew the use of first- or second-person pronouns. So it would be a good idea to modify your statement not to include the word “you.” In addition, the word “demonstrate” is a bit awkward in this context. You could replace it with something like, “Marcus Brutus is an example of one who will go against a friend not out of hate, but out of a greater love for his country.”
Also, be sure to use examples that will tie this thesis in with the theme you're discussing -- that Brutus's desire for power is not for personal reasons, but a result of a utilitarian ideal. He is willing to sacrifice a friend for what he believes is the greater good of the people; his desire for power is rooted in a desire to do good.
All in all it sounds like you have the makings of a good paper! Good luck!
Possible Thesis statements:
In The Tragedy of Julius Caesar, Brutus demonstrates a love for his country even at the expense of killing his friend Caesar.
In The Tragedy of Julius Caesar, Brutus kills his friend Caesar due to his greater love for his country.
In The Tragedy of Julius Caesar, Brutus demonstrates his love for his country by protecting it against his friend Caesar who become overly ambitious.
In The Tragedy of Julius Caesar, Brutus risks his life to end the power of his friend Caesar who had become overly ambitious.