What do you think of my body paragraph 5?Both these novels share common themes of cultural identity and tradition. The two young girls, Sara and Emily find it hard to adapt to their family’s...

What do you think of my body paragraph 5?

Both these novels share common themes of cultural identity and tradition. The two young girls, Sara and Emily find it hard to adapt to their family’s tradition and culture, which makes it hard to find who they really are through culture. Everything revolves around their culture and they are often uncomfortable with facing that. In Bread Givers, Sara finds it hard to deal with her father’s ways of culture and tradition. In Emily Goldberg Learns to Salsa, Emily is confused of her background due to her parent’s having different backgrounds. Both of these young girls are Jewish, but Emily is half Puerto Rican as well. The young girls are able to identify who they really through culture eventually as the novels progress.

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William Delaney | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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Both these novels share common themes of cultural identity and tradition. The two young girls, Sara and Emily find it hard to adapt to their family’s tradition and culture, which makes it hard to find who they really are through culture. Everything revolves around their culture and they are often uncomfortable with facing that. In Bread Givers, Sara finds it hard to deal with her father’s ways of culture and tradition. In Emily Goldberg Learns to Salsa, Emily is confused of her background due to her parent’s having different backgrounds. Both of these young girls are Jewish, but Emily is half Puerto Rican as well. The young girls are able to identify who they really through culture eventually as the novels progress.

I have copied your paragraph above for my convenience in referring it.

It sounds pretty good. There are minor points. In the second sentence you don't have to say "young girls" because the names show they are both females and they must be girls if they are young. You might say "the two young protagonists" or "the two young viewpoint characters." They are probably not uncomfortable with facing their cultures but more likely puzzled and confused by understanding and assimilating them. Emily is not confused of her background but confused by her background. You shouldn't repeat "background" in the same sentence. I should think that Emily would be confused about her own identity and values due to her parents coming from different backgrounds. The last sentence would read better as: As the novels progress, the two girls are both able to identify who they really are through analysing and adjusting to their mixed cultures.

Back to the first sentence: The two novels share common themes of the difficulties created for young people  by inheriting mixed and sometimes conflicting cultural backgrounds and traditions.

(If you post more questions of this type, you should show the topic as Essay Lab rather than Literature.)

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missyngdiva | Student, Grade 10 | (Level 1) Honors

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4th Body Paragraph Revised:

The two novels share common themes of the difficulties created for young people  by inheriting mixed and sometimes conflicting cultural backgrounds and traditions.The two young viewpoint characters, Sara and Emily’s family traditions and culture confuses and puzzles them when it comes to understanding and assimilating them. Everything revolves around their culture and they are often uncomfortable with facing that. InBread Givers, Sara finds it hard to deal with her father’s ways of culture and tradition. In Emily Goldberg Learns to Salsa, Emily is confused of her identity and values due to her parents coming from different backgrounds. Both of the two young protagonists are Jewish, but Emily is half Puerto Rican as well. As the novels progress, the two girls are both able to identify who they really are through analysing and adjusting to their mixed cultures.

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