Is this a good thesis statement? When Harper Lee composed To Kill a Mockingbird she must of thought to include several different characters that show what is courage and why the standard...

Is this a good thesis statement?

When Harper Lee composed To Kill a Mockingbird she must of thought to include several different characters that show what is courage and why the standard definition is different.

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kcoleman2016 | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Associate Educator

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Hello! This is a fantastic start- I love the ideas inside of it! What I'm going to do for my critiques is approach it from two different angles: content and grammar. 

Content

A thesis statement is an argument that you spend the rest of your paper trying to prove. The best way to ensure that your thesis is an argument is to use the word "because" or something similar; using a conjunction like "because" gives your sentence a cause (the part after "because") and an effect (the part before). Therefore, I would encourage you to rearrange your thoughts here so that your argument is really clear to your reader: 

Effect because cause.

In the case of your specific argument, that would look like this:

Harper Lee includes many different characters (could you possible be more specific here?) in her novel To Kill a Mockingbird because she wants to show/develop/illustrate the many definitions of courage.

Grammar

There were two things I wanted to highlight about your original thesis for you to avoid in the future. 

  1. TAG: This acronym stands for Title, Author, Genre. Including all three within your thesis statement (or introduction paragraph) is more specific and gives you, the author, much more credibility. 
  2. of vs. have: "Of" is a preposition, or a word used to show one things relationship with something else (ex: on top of that, some of this, mother of the bride). "Have" is a verb that can be used by itself to show possession (ex: I have a cat) or to support another verb in a specific tense (ex: He could have won, You would have laughed). Although they often sound the same in spoken English, they are very different in written English. 

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