Is this a good thesis for a critical paper?
I have to write a critical paper and chose to write about Raymond Carver's Catherdral. I know exactly what I want to say but am having an issue putting a thesis together. This is what I came up with:
The relationship the narrator's wife has with Robert has everything her own marriage lacks; excitement, communication, and friendship.
Is that even a thesis?
These are the three examples I wanted to incorporate:
The excitement she shows while Robert is there and how the time he touched her face made her want to write a poem - something she only does when important things happen. (She never shows excitement for her husband.)
I am going to point how much communication the narrator's wife and Robert have even though they live so far away just by way of these tapes. (The narrator and his wife don't talk very much and keep it short and simple when they do.)
The friendship between the narrator's wife and Robert is so rich and full of love and caring. Robert asked for the tapes because he cares to hear about how her life is going. ( There isn't much connection between the narrator and his wife anymore, the intimacy is gone.)
Am I going about this paper completely wrong??
Thanks in advance!!
No, I think you are definitely on the right track. I would only suggest that you need to include the husband in the thesis and in the essay because he is the narrator, observer, and the person who experiences the epiphany. Your thesis sentence might be modified slightly to read something like "The narrator in "Cathedral" is jealous because his wife's relationship with Robert has everything their own relationship lacks: excitement, communication, and friendship." Then you could go ahead and give the examples you have selected. But I think you ought to bring in the narrator at the end, perhaps saying how he had changed as a result of his interacting with Robert in drawing the cathedral. You might want to forecast whether the change in the narrator is likely to improve the relationship between him and his wife.I think you would have captured the essence of Carver's story.