Is this a good start to my essay?This is what I have going on for my essay so far.   The ward system in municipal politics and the at-large system used in North Vancouver municipalities can be...

Is this a good start to my essay?

This is what I have going on for my essay so far.

 

The ward system in municipal politics and the at-large system used in North Vancouver municipalities can be differentiated in how they work and the advantages and disadvantages they bring.

I don't know how to make my intro longer. I need 1 more sentence. Then i have my next paragraph which explains the ward system. Then another about the at large.

 

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accessteacher | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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In introductions I normally find to stop them being boring and to make them interesting you want some kind of initial "hook" that is going to attract your reader to keep on reading. Your introduction as it stands is good, but it is hardly different or eye-catching. What you need to do is do some research into the topic of the essay and come up with some kind of contradictory or challenging statement that goes to the "heart" of what your essay is all about and start off with that. I often recommend my students to find a particularly juicy quote to start off with that lays the ground, so to speak, for the rest of your essay. So that is what I would recommend for you - maybe go back over your research notes or look up something on the net concerning this topic and see what you can find. Good luck!

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