Is this a good concrete detail for a syntax paragraph on Antony's funeral speech in Julius Caesar?
In the beginning, Antony opens with a single sentence followed by the repetition of “friends” addressing them that Brutus and Caesar weren’t the “ambitious” and “honorable” men that people thought they were.
Yes, the repetition Antony uses in his speech is an example of syntax that lends to his persuasiveness. Also, consider how he throws out rhetorical questions quite often. He forms the question in a way so the plebians are always agreeing with him. At first, he makes it sounds like he agrees that Brutus did what he had too, but then after giving some "facts" on the murder that suddenly make Brutus look more blood thirsty. His questions, at this point, have the plebians thinking in a different way and signing a different tune.
Are you analyzing Antony's use of syntax? If so, the first part of your sentence is good as it relates to syntax. The sentence as a whole is confusing. If you want to discuss Antony's use of irony at the end of many of his lines when he states, "and Brutus is an honorable man," this would work well with your analysis of syntax. In your analysis discuss why Antony places the phrase about Brutus being honorable at the end of his statements.
Likewise, if you are looking for more concrete examples of Antony's syntax, discuss his use of the will. How does he tease the plebians with it? How does he connect where he is physically (near Caesar's body) with where he stands figuratively?