Thesis StatementI have to write an Argumentative research essay. "Should the elderly retake a driving test to continue to drive?" I know the question, What age is considered "elderly", is left open...

Thesis Statement

I have to write an Argumentative research essay.
"Should the elderly retake a driving test to continue to drive?"

I know the question, What age is considered "elderly", is left open so should i include in thesis and is that thesis I gave a good one?

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litteacher8 | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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I don't think the age necessarily needs to be included in the thesis, as long as you address it directly somewhere soon in the essay. The most important part of the essay is the thesis, and the thesis needs to explain your purpose in the essay.
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melkoosmann | (Level 1) Senior Educator

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I agree with #7 that good driving tests are an essential part of testing elderly drivers. I believe the tests are better in some places than others. I have an elderly aunt in California who has been required to take the test repeatedly. She has failed twice because she does unsafe things during the test. After failing, she also had the chance to take a driving class and regain her license. I think California's system is a good one: it requires elderly people to prove their skills, but it also gives them options that allow them to maintain their independence.

The issue of elderly drivers, like many other issues, can get too big to address in a single essay if you try to include every part of it. Depending on how you create your thesis statement, you may or may not want to address driving tests in your essay. If the topic of tests does not seem to fit in under your thesis, either leave it out or mention it briefly in your conclusion.

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ask996 | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Senior Educator

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Everyone has raised valid issues but I'm wondering if any of the issues raised really support administering drivers tests to the elderly. Think about this, most of the situations that occur with elderly drivers can easily be avoided during a drivers test. I think back to mine, and the test is much different than actual driving situations. Perhaps there should be an alternative test-something virtual that simulates real life driving situations.

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mwestwood | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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In addition to the other suggestions, consider researching to find the statistics on how many accidents per year occur that involve 70+ individuals.  Find ones in which people drive into buildings and others in which the drivers say they thought they stepped on the brake, but it was the accelerator instead.  These accidents often make TV news!

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jmj616 | Middle School Teacher | (Level 3) Associate Educator

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Your idea about researching the age at which the body begins to decline is a great one--except that I'm afraid to hear the results!  I think I've been in decline for a long time!  The good news is that the brain is still working.

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pohnpei397 | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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I would argue that you should at least have some little bit about "why" in your thesis statement.  So I would say "In order to protect other drivers, people 70 and over should be testerequired to retake the driving test."  Or "Because age is not a good way to determine who is likely to be able to drive well, we should not force drivers over 70 to retake the driving test."

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jmj616 | Middle School Teacher | (Level 3) Associate Educator

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A thesis statement usually takes a stand on an issue, rather than merely raising a question; therefore, you have not yet presented a thesis statement.

Some of the following would be good thesis statements:

a) Drivers should have to retake a driving test when they reach the age of 70.

b) People should be allowed to decide for themselves when they are too old to drive.

c) All drivers should be required to take a new driving test every ten years.

For more information, see:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Thesis_statement

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brihope | Student, Undergraduate | eNotes Newbie

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Thank you @pohnpei397 and @jmj616

These were both very helpfull. Do you think if I did research in Psycology and Anatomy for what ages the body starts showing a reverse instead of progress to determince how I word my thesis? If not I am thinking the "People should be required to take a driving test every ten years," would be a good one.

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