Rewrite each sentence below, replacing the inflated diction with clear, straightforward words.  The responses of the public to the survey revealed that there is growing concern about lack of...

Rewrite each sentence below, replacing the inflated diction with clear, straightforward words.

 

The responses of the public to the survey revealed that there is growing concern about lack of safety on public thoroughfares.

Whenever she became overwhelmed by the ordinariness of everyday life, she would ensconce herself in a sedentary position and absorb herself in a book.

The new dishwashing product left a residue of unsightly discolorations on the stemware.

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jmj616 | Middle School Teacher | (Level 3) Associate Educator

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These examples aren't all that bad, really.  There are much more severe examples of gobbledygook being cranked out every day by bureaucrats, corporations, school administrators, and even teachers.  Sometimes it's simply a matter of laziness and illiteracy; other times, it's a deliberate attempt to obfuscate.  Obfuscate?  That's a fancy word that just means to fog up, to hide something behind a storm of five-dollar words.

Anyway, here's my attempt at rewriting these gems in a language called English.

a) People are concerned that the roads are dangerous.

b) Whenever she got fed up with life, she would lie down and read a good book.

c) The new dish soap left an ugly scum on the glasses.

 

 

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