Revise the following paragraph to eliminate any run-on sentences. Taking physical education at school prepares a student for lifelong fitness, safe exercise, and a healthy lifestyle. Young children...

Revise the following paragraph to eliminate any run-on sentences. Taking physical education at school prepares a student for lifelong fitness, safe exercise, and a healthy lifestyle. Young children are naturally active and bum a lot of energy unfortunately many teens get too little exercise. Studies show that teens who stop exercising become less fit they also gain weight. Statistics from Health Canada reveal that only 70 percent of young men and women between the ages of 15 and 19 exercise regularly this suggests that up to three out of every ten high school students do not get enough exercise. School is the ideal place to keep teens involved; they might not seek out other opportunities to participate in sports.

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shannyn1775 | Elementary School Teacher | (Level 1) Adjunct Educator

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Here is your revised paragraph. You did have a few run-on sentences, and if you reread your work, you could learn to find them. They are simple enough to fix by splitting them into two separate sentences. 

Taking physical education at school prepares a student for lifelong fitness, safe exercise, and a healthy lifestyle. Young children are naturally active and bum a lot of energy. Unfortunately, many teens get too little exercise. Studies show that teens who stop exercising become less fit. They also gain weight. Statistics from Health Canada reveal that only 70 percent of young men and women between the ages of 15 and 19 exercise regularly. This suggests that up to three out of every ten high school students do not get enough exercise. School is the ideal place to keep teens involved; they might not seek out other opportunities to participate in sports.

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William Delaney | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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I have revised your paragraph as requested. It seems to me that your problem is not with run-on sentences but with punctuation. For example, "Young children are naturally active and burn a lot of energy unfortunately many teens get too little exercise" is not a run-on sentence but two sentences which should be divided by a period after the word "energy." The same is true of "Statistics from Health Canada reveal that only 70 percent of young men and women between the ages of 15 and 19 exercise regularly this suggests that up to three out of every ten high school students do not get enough exercise." There should be a period after the word "regularly." The rest is a new sentence, as I have shown in my revised version below.

Taking physical education at school prepares a student for lifelong fitness, safe exercise, and a healthy lifestyle. Young children are naturally active and bum a lot of energy. Unfortunately, many teenagers get too little exercise. Studies have shown that teenagers who stop exercising become less fit. They also gain weight. Statistics from Health Canada reveal that only 70 percent of young men and women between the ages of 15 and 19 exercise regularly. This suggests that up to three out of every ten high school students may not be getting enough exercise. School is the ideal place to keep teenagers involved in sports. They might not seek out opportunities to participate in sports and other types of healthy exercise elsewhere.

I have frequently recommended Strunk and White's book The Elements of Style. It is full of useful information about grammar and is easy to read. E. B. White is best known as the author of two children's books, Charlotte's Web and Stuart Little. William Strunk, Jr. was White's English teacher in college.

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