Regarding the short story Thank You, M'am, write Roger's letter to Mrs. Jones the day after the incident takes place. I wrote it. Please check my mistakes and the grammar and see if it needs any...

Regarding the short story Thank You, M'am, write Roger's letter to Mrs. Jones the day after the incident takes place.

I wrote it. Please check my mistakes and the grammar and see if it needs any new ideas.

                                                                               october 4,2015

Dear Mrs. Jones ,

Hello Mrs. Jones I'm Roger , I want to thank you for that ten dollars and for teaching me the right things and to be a better person, meeting you has changed many things in my life , you are a kind and great woman .

I started looking for a job ,I hope to find it quickly and to meet you again .

Yours Roger ;

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Jessica Pope | College Teacher | (Level 1) Educator

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Hi there,

The letter you've written has the appropriate tone. It's polite, respectful, and gracious. The content of your letter is also good. Roger expresses his gratitude to Mrs. Jones and informs her as to his future plans. Great! 

There were some punctuation errors in your letter, which have been corrected in the revised version below. Also, I've added a few phrases here and there for the sake of smoothness and clarity. Feel free to ask any other questions you may have about the letter or the corrections I've made. Here's the revised version —

October 4, 2015

Dear Mrs. Jones,

Thank you for the ten dollars you gave me. It really helped a lot. Also, thank you for your guidance. What I've learned with you has helped me to become a better person. Meeting you has changed my life. You are a kind and generous woman; I am forever indebted to you.

I've started looking for a new job. I hope to find one quickly and, to see you again sometime soon.

Yours,

Roger

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