RE: What do you think of my speech? Final Copy. Hi there, For English, we have to compose a speech where we read a novel called 'A Bridge to Wiseman's Cove' by James Moloney and compare it to a film of our choice (in my case, A Christmas Carol) which is based on the concept of the search for identity. In my previous discussion (http://www.enotes.com/ref/discuss/what-do-you-think-my-speech-118749?start=0) I put the second draft of my speech for review. Now, I have incorporated the advice of many to produce my final copy. Please, if there is any last minute feedback or criticism, please let me know! :) _ As we age, we believe that we begin to understand our identity. However, this idea is rarely true. Our search for identity never ends, as we constantly have new experiences that change who we are. In Robert Zemeckis’ film A Christmas Carol based on the novella by Charles Dickens, this is illustrated by the character Ebenezer Scrooge. Like Harley from James Moloney’s novel A Bridge to Wiseman’s Cove, Scrooge changes, he goes from being a parsimonious man to being a caring person. Through the many events and characters that influence Scrooges’ identity, accentuated through the use of various film techniques, Scrooges’ story unfolds before the audience as an engrossing tale focused on the concept of the search for identity. Continued next paragraph.

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I agree with 7 and 8. When you actually present this, it might be too long. Also, consider how long even four minutes is to an audience. I suggest that you test it out on an audience, and also don't forget to read and time it. There are some repetitive elements.
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Since you changed the things I pointed out, of course I like it now :-D.  As far as the issue of what is "enough" in the way of comparisons, I'm afraid that I'm not able to help.  I didn't make up the assignment so I don't know what's expected.  I also have never read the book...

But this is, overall, very nicely written.  I've seen many, many speeches and essays that were nowhere near this good.  I hope it goes well.

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My only suggestion would be to carefully read through the speech to think about what you could remove in terms of summary in order to concentrate more on the comparisons you make.  Is your audience familiar with the movie?  Will they need as much summary as you give in order to make sense?  Other than that it appears quite polished and certainly should fill four minutes.

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I think this is very nicely done. I especially like that you have integrated some points of comparison throughout the paper. This is very thorough for a four minute presentation, and you incorporated many of the suggestions from your original thread very wisely.

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