What suggestions do you have for a thesis statement? My enitire essay is written and I can not think of a statement that corresponds with it.My essay is about how America as a whole is moving...

What suggestions do you have for a thesis statement? My enitire essay is written and I can not think of a statement that corresponds with it.

My essay is about how America as a whole is moving towards fewer vis-a-vis interation and more socialization through technology. I came to this realization, when on my way to get a cat scan, I looked over and saw many people engrossed in their phones and not paying any attention to the people around them.

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mwestwood | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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If you are having difficulty forming a thesis statement for your essay, you may want to reconsider what you have written as more of a rough draft than a finished essay since it is really best to begin with a blueprint of what you are going to write, a blueprint that contains first a thesis statement.  In this way you can better organize your writing.

Prior to writing your thesis statement, you may wish to re-examine what you have written and determine whether you are writing a descriptive essay or a persuasive one.  If you are writing a descriptive essay, then you are presenting a visual picture of your experience.  For, instance, you will want to use sensual imagery in describing the scenes that you witnessed. Concentrating on the five senses in your description will provide vivid and specific details that can support the thesis. 

If, on the other hand, if you are writing a persuasive essay, you may wish to make a point about how people are becoming desensitized to one another as they are more involved with technology. Your argument may be that this dehumanization has harmful effects upon people's personal relationships and their ability to share genuine feelings in real life will lessen their happiness. Be sure that you include some viable studies and reports.

Now, the thesis statement is your main point; it is a general statement that contains 3 opinions that you will use as topic sentences for your body paragraphs. Then, you will provide support through examples, statistics, or statements from authorities.  So, the thesis will state that the increase in social networking has negative effects upon personal relationships such as a ______, ________, and _______. These three points, then, become the topic sentences of the body paragraphs.

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alisia97 | Student, Grade 9 | eNotes Newbie

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Thank you for your help. I was writing a significant experience essay and there was no need for a thesis. (Sorry I should have included it.) However, the suggestions you gave helped lead me to my universal statement. Thanks again. =)

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