I agree with both answerers--you're off to an excellent start. I'd also make sure that when you narrow your thesis you make sure that that part is your own idea, in your own words. When I say "narrowing" your thesis, I'm talking about taking the big idea and showing how it relates to some specific aspect of the novel (that's the part where tthakar suggests you say something like " Golding embodies his boys with extremes to enable us to examine the nature of "good" and "evil". Making sure that you've narrowed your thesis and that you are clear about how the general thesis connects to the narrowed one may be the difference between an A and a B paper.
Hi there- I totally agree with tthakker. I would be happy to see a thesis statement with so much promise on one of my papers!
You might add something as simple as an addition that includes the title of the novel, ie, "In Wm Golding's novel Lord of the Flies..." Do be careful to use your own words, however. If you use the tthaker's suggestion verbatim in your paper, you must cite it or it will be considered plagiarism.
thank you very much. I'll mke it with my own words.