In my Hamlet essay, I need help rewriting the thesis because it cannot be a question and I need help writing the first two body paragraphs. Can someone please help.
A. Topic: Is it better to be alive or dead? B. Details 1. Live and suffer? 2. Die and be peaceful? 3. Do live and suffer and then die and be peaceful? C. Thesis: What is there in life that death cannot consume? Can life make you suffer or would it give you peace by death?
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A. Topic Sentence: Is life nothing more than a game played by Lady Luck?B. Details: 1. Many people believe she plays with people’s lives like games. 2. In my opinion, I believe no you cannot prove whether she is playing with our lives as one of many games. 3. My belief was wrong. Going back to the quote in Act Two Scene 2, “Running back and forth, spraying the flames with her tears, a cloth on that head where a crown had recently sat and a blanket instead of a robe wrapped around her body, which has withered from childbearing: anyone seeing her in such a state, no matter how spiteful he was, would have cursed Lady Luck for bringing her down like that. If the gods had seen her while she watched Pyrrhus chopping her husband into bits, the terrible cry she uttered would have made all the eyes in heaven burn with hot tears—unless the gods don’t care at all about human affairs.” In this quote you can see Lady Luck played with the queen like she was a game. C. Transition: Sometimes lady luck takes the game to far. It can sometimes be more than a person can handle. With the end result being death.
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A. Topic Sentence: Is there true peace in death? B. Details 1. “Dying, sleeping—that’s all dying is—a sleep that ends all the heartache and shocks that life on earth gives us—that’s an achievement to wish for.” 2. “To die, to sleep—to sleep, maybe to dream. Ah, but there’s the catch: in deaths sleep who knows what kind of dreams might come, after we’ve put the noise and commotion of life behind us. That’s certainly something to worry about.” 3. “That’s the consideration that makes us stretch out our sufferings so long.” C. Transition: The consequences death can give out way the consequences life gives.
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A. Topic Sentence: Isn’t it better to live your life to the fullest and then die peacefully rather than taking your life early? B. Details 1. “That’s the consideration that makes us stretch out our sufferings so long.” 2. Living life would be better than dying because you wouldn’t be leaving the people who cared about you behind. 3. If you die early by your own hand, the people who care about you would be distraught. Show people how good life is. C. Transition: Whatever the case may be, you can tell that life is more precious than death.
A. Restate Thesis: Are there precious treasures that death cannot touch? Is death the prefect end to all suffering? B. Details 1. Live and suffer? 2. Die and be peaceful? 3. Do live and suffer and then die and be peaceful? C. Lead Reader out: Do you think life is better than death or would you give up everything just to have some sense of peace?
Using questions in essays is a good way to engage with the reader. However, do take care not to overwhelm the reader who is still considering the first question and then is faced with another question. Ask the question and then give the reader some possible answers because this will help the reader to focus on what it is that you are telling him. You do not indicate what task you were set and how closely your essay should discuss Hamlet's death and the spirituality theme and how it relates to revenge but, in Hamlet, it is a subjective issue and so your belief - which you seem to mention in paragraph three - should be revealed in your introductory paragraph as part of your thesis statement. After all, you are explaining this so that the reader can understand your perspective and give it some consideration.
A thesis statement, as you have pointed out, should never be a question because its purpose is to highlight the topic and reveal the overall theme without being either of those things specifically. It must not be too vague because then the reader may not understand the direction your essay is headed. So, you may want to lead up to it with something like:
The queen's ability to accept the death of her husband so casually provokes emotions and fears in Hamlet. He is disappointed, betrayed and so confused that rational decisions escape him. Thesis (in keeping with your question): Death may be seen to solve (consume) so many problems but it also raises so many issues because, after a life of suffering, there needs to be certainty that death brings peace.
For the first body paragraph, as you speak of "Lady Luck," introduce "her" rather than questioning her motives and using such a long quote as this may confuse the reader. For example, using the same thread as you have, you could try:
There is an inevitable uncertainty about life's purpose. Having initially dismissed the "Lady Luck" ("Fortune") concept and her apparent control over people's lives, it seems there may be some merit in her abilities. She clearly manipulates the queen in the play that Hamlet recalls and as seen in Act II, scene ii, line 505, "Anyone....would have cursed Lady Luck for bringing her [the queen] down like that," there are times when matters go too far (eNotes).
If the intention is to draw parallels with the play, you may consider adding that this certainly has an impact on Hamlet. It does prompt him to think of ways he can use the same cunning to trick his uncle and "catch the conscience of the King," as he says in line 601.
The transition could be: Things often get out of control and the "game" goes too far - further than anticipated. This can be seen in Hamlet's anger at his conflicted self, how effected he is by the betrayal and his consideration whether it is "all for nothing" (550).
In the second body paragraph, wherein Hamlet's famous speech is discussed, it is important to add your own understanding. You could try:
When considering the potential whether there is true peace in death, Hamlet's speech presents arguments that are difficult to avoid. To end the "heart-ache" referred to in Act III, scene i, line 62, is definitely preferred and is to be strived for. However, in thinking about death as being "sleep," there is also the possibility that, "in death's sleep who knows what kind of dreams might come" (66). (Transition) It is this potential for nightmares and a worse scenario than life, that stops many people from seeking death as a means to end pain.