Need help completing these sentencesHello, I keep getting the following sentences wrong. Topic heading~Combining Related Ideas 1) The train was scheduled to arrive at 6:30; ___, it had not...

Need help completing these sentences

Hello, I keep getting the following sentences wrong.

Topic heading~Combining Related Ideas

1) The train was scheduled to arrive at 6:30; ___, it had not arrived by 7:00.

I put ("yet",) in the blank.

*my teacher wrote. Son(y)Fab. - join w/ comma only.

Topic heading~~~~Keeping Related Parts together(revise each sentences below by keeping related parts together)

3) Julie, while drinking a glass of iced tea, finished her homework.  I put: (While drinking ice a glass of iced tea, Julie finished her homework)

*My teacher wrote: Change it up, variation is essential. Put subordinate ideas second. :S

~topic heading: Combining ideas Effectively.

1) I was constantly interrupted as I worked on my composition, and the doorbell rang, and my pen ran out of ink.

I put( I was constantly interrupted as I worked on my composition, and when the doorbell rang my pen ran out of ink.

2) I came to Canada as a small boy, and my brother came also and I am now a Canadian citizen.

I put (My brother and I came to Canada while I was a small boy, now I am a Canadian citizen.

Would this work? My brother and I came to Canada as small children. We are now Canadian citizens.

and finally.

3) My dog has to be taken for walks and he doesn't always want to go, but my mother insists.

I put (My mother insists that I take my dog for walks, but my dog doesn't always want to go.

*My teacher wrote: *This changes the meaning* between (but my dog doesn't always want to go)

Any help is greatly appreciated! Thanks

1 Answer | Add Yours

lynnebh's profile pic

lynnebh | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Senior Educator

Posted on

This looks like your homework assignment. What you are being asked to do is to combine these sentences using the various types of words or punctuation that we use to combine sentences, independent clauses and dependent clauses to make the ideas make sense. In English, there are many words that accomplish this purpose, i.e. conjunctions, relative pronouns, commas, semi-colons, colons, etc. So in each of your sentences, you must combine them as indicated in your teacher's instructions.

So, in number #1, you have to combine the related ideas. Your teacher marked "combine with comma only" - which I'm not totally clear on, because the comma is already there, so perhaps he/she means:

  1. The train was scheduled to arrive by 6:30; however, it had not arrived by 7:00.

If I am misinterpreting this one, perhaps another teacher will reply.

For the next one, since your teacher said to "change it up" and put the subordinate ideas second, I will assume that the main clause is that "Julie finished her homework" (since you wrote it the opposite and it was corrected) so you could write:

Julie finished her homework while drinking a glass of iced tea. ("while drinking a glass of iced tea" is a subordinate idea and a subordinate clause).

In the next one:

I was constantly interrupted as I worked on my composition, and the doorbell rang, and my pen ran out of ink

There are several different ideas and you need to combine them so that they make sense. There are several possibilities:

I was constantly interrupted as I worked on my composition; the doorbell rang and my pen ran out of ink.

or

I was constantly interrupted as I worked on my composition - the doorbell rang and my pen ran out of ink.

or

As I worked on my composition, I was constantly interrupted; the doorbell rang and my pen ran out of ink.

Next:

I came to Canada as a small boy, and my brother came also and I am now a Canadian citizen

Rewrite:

My brother and I came to Canada as small boys. I am now a Canadian citizen.

or, you can make it all plural, as you have done, and say:

My brother and I came to Canada as small boys (or as children). We are now Canadian citizens.

In the last one, I'm not sure that what you wrote changes the meaning, but here are some alternatives:

My dog has to be taken for walks and he doesn't always want to go, but my mother insists.

Rewrite:

My mother insists that my dog must be taken for walks, but he doesn't always want to go.

or

Although my mother insists that my dog must be taken for walks, he doesn't always want to go.

We’ve answered 318,915 questions. We can answer yours, too.

Ask a question