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My family is a small family with three people. My mother is a great woman . She is currently unemployed and now staying at home doing housework. She was a single mom  for long time, but she always took care of me and my brother very well. She is very strong and good at cooking. My younger brother is studying in grade 10 at Overfelt high school. He always walks or takes the bus to school because he doesn't has driver . He is very amusing. He always jokes and tells something funny. He is a dynamic and talkative. I am working at Micro Lamba Wireless company. I'm studying English at San Jose City College. I'm very shy and quiet. In brief, we are a small family, but we always spend a good time together.

Can you correct grammar for me?

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I very much enjoyed your paragraph and the portrait of your family! If you'd like to revise with a focus on only grammatical issues (as opposed to the questions of style and personal taste that mwestwood addresses above), here's where I would start:

There's an article missing in the line "She was a single mom for long time"—the phrase is usually "for a long time." (Articles are tough.)

The sentence "My younger brother is studying in grade 10 at Overfelt high school" sounds grammatically correct to me, but "studying in grade 10" is a phrase that I've heard less often. The more typical way to express that idea might be: "My younger brother is in 10th grade at Overfelt High School." (Also, in the name of the high school, the words "high school" are usually capitalized—so "I go to high school" is just fine, but if you say "I go to Overfelt High School" it has to be capitalized as part of the name "Overfelt High School.")

"He always walks or takes the bus to school because he doesn't has driver" is really close! "Has" should reflect the auxiliary verb "does" (or here "doesn't") next to it: "He always walks or takes the bus to school because he doesn't have driver." "Driver" also needs an article: "he doesn't have driver."

"He always jokes and tells something funny" is also really close! The only thing is that "tell" usually takes a direct object (meaning you have to tell someone). So how about: "He always jokes and says something funny"? Or maybe "He always jokes and tells me funny things"?

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My family is a small family of three people. My mother is a great woman who is currently unemployed and now staying at home doing housework. She was a single mom for long time, but she always took good care of my brother and me. She is very strong and good at cooking.

My younger brother is studying in grade 10 at Overfelt high school. He always walks or takes the bus to school because he doesn't drive. He is very amusing. He always jokes and says funny things. He is dynamic and talkative.

I am working at Micro Lamba Wireless company. I'm studying English at San Jose City College. I'm very shy and quiet.

In brief, we are a small family, but we always have a good time together.

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I loved your paragraph! below is the corrected grammar.

My family is small with three people. My mother is a great woman. She is currently unemployed, and now stays at home doing housework. She was single for a long time, but she took care of my brother and me well. She is very strong and she is good at cooking. My younger brother is studying in grade 10 at Overfelt High School. He walks or takes the bus to school because he doesn't have a driver. He is funny and always tells jokes. He is dynamic and talkative. I work at Micro Lamba Wireless company. I'm studying English at San Jose City College. I'm shy and quiet. In brief, we are a small family, but we always spend time together.

In addition to correcting the grammar, I have taken out some words that are unnecessary. Although it is technically correct grammar to use "very" before an adjective, it is an unnecessary "throw away word" and makes the sentence clunky. Additionally I took out your sentence "He is very amusing." because you express the same thing in the following sentence with more detail.

A couple of notes on punctuation: Make sure to delete spaces between the last word of the sentence and the period. When using conjunctions like "and" or "but" in a sentence, check to see if the clauses before and after the conjunction are complete sentences on their own. If so, you need a comma before the conjunction. In a sentence with conjunctions, make sure all the the verbs are parallel (for example in your 3rd sentence "is" and "staying" should be "is" and "stays."

I hope I have helped you!