I need double-checking on my grammar corrections of misplaced and dangling modifiers.I've rewritten the following sentences to avoid misplaced or dangling modifiers. 1. Hoping to catch the mouse, a...

I need double-checking on my grammar corrections of misplaced and dangling modifiers.

I've rewritten the following sentences to avoid misplaced or dangling modifiers.

1. Hoping to catch the mouse, a trap baited with cheese was left under the sink.

In hope of catching the mouse, a trap baited with cheese was left under the sink.

2. I noticed my parents standing at the back of the hall while receiving my diploma.

I noticed my parents standing at the back of the hall while I was receiving my diploma.

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clairewait | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Educator Emeritus

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Keep in mind that a misplaced modifier often makes the sentence sound like the wrong noun is doing or receiving the action of the verb.  You've done well by correcting the 2nd sentence to make sure "parents" weren't receiving "my diploma."  Another way to change this is to simply change the order of the sentence:

While receiving my diploma, I noticed my parents standing at the back of the hall.

Sentence number one is tricky because the "trap" is not the thing "hoping" to catch the mouse, however, the one hoping is unnamed.  In this case, I would advise changing the order of the sentence, rather than introduce a person who does not yet exist:

A trap baited with cheese was left under the sink in hope of catching the mouse.

 

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