May I get a help to correct or evaluate this essay?MIT needed it in their application process. Topic: Although you may not yet know what you want to major in, which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why? (*) (100 word or fewer)   The department of EECS appeals to me most. Since I explored the world of electronic devices at the club of science in my high-school, I have been feeling my passion for Electrical Engineering. I enjoy the theoretical aspects & basic principles of CS as well. Having an excel in different computer program (C,Java)  inspires me to work with CS. UROP in Media Lab, Biomedical Engineering Lab, Microsystems Technology Lab & Energy and the Environment (which I consider most important in this crucial time of environment) would give me the chance to have a live experience to formulate new theories & inventions. Perhaps, my skill of being communicable can be my cat’s paw with the best faculty of  the world!  

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I would suggest you try to give some more concrete examples of past experiences that support your choice of EECS. What was a specific activity you enjoyed while exploring the world of electronic devices and why did you like it? What is a particular experience or program you have written in a programming language that makes you proud? Why are you proud of it? Instead of listing different labs that might be available for use in formulating new theories and inventions, narrow down your focus. Pick one area and outline how you might use the facilities of that particular lab to advance an idea or research a question that interests you. I'm not sure what your last sentence means, but I think you're trying to be clever and complimentary. You'd be better off using that part of your 100 word limit to make your abilities shine, not to sweet-talk MIT.

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