For To Kill A Mockingbird, please asses me on this review.Please give contructive critism on my review on the To Kill A Mockingbird play. Ideally, it it written for the Calgary Herald and I am...

For To Kill A Mockingbird, please asses me on this review.

Please give contructive critism on my review on the To Kill A Mockingbird play. Ideally, it it written for the Calgary Herald and I am writing on a memorable moment:

 

“I felt sorry for her.” – quoted by Tom Robinson. The fact that he had the audacity to admit this, especially at the heart of his trial, was really significant. It really left me in a shocked and incredulous position. For despite his living conditions, this honest, conscientious and decent black man sympathized for a white woman, something that should never happen. I believe that during this time, racism upheld that prohibition. Therefore, this statement was probably what had gotten Tom convicted in the first place. As mentioned earlier, Tom had a sincere and a kind-hearted nature, which in the end, cost him his life.

 

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You finish your writing with the very observation that should be the thesis driving your review--"Tom had a sincere and a kind-hearted nature, which in the end, cost him his life." Then you should proceed to write a review that proves this assertion. You use the word audacious which means "recklessly bold," and while his actions and confession were reckless, bold would not really fit with your assertion about being kind-hearted. Also, your use of the word prohibition doesn't fit here either.

You use a quote, that could be incorporated quite nicely with the thesis, but you haven't used it effectively. In what other actions does Tom engage that shows his kind-hearted but naive nature.  You've also expressed a lot of opinion, but your haven't really used specific facts and details to support your opinion.

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