Please help me with an introduction and thesis statement for an essay about how society can help young mothers who are returning to college.

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As you write your introduction, you will probably need to have an attention getter or hook.  Almost all teachers will expect to see this.  You could provide an interesting or surprising statistic about your topic or perhaps an anecdote that is related to it.  For example, if you are a single mom trying to get back to school or if you know such a person, you might say a little about the difficulties you (or the person you know) face.  This article has a surprising statistic about how many college students are “non-traditional.”  If you used that statistic, your introduction could start out something like this: “Did you know that 71% of all college students are non-traditional students?  Most people think that all college students come right out of high school, but this is not true.  Some of these students are single mothers who are going back to school and need help.”

The next thing you need to do in your introduction is to give a little bit of a “road map” as to where your essay is going.  You would need to briefly outline what main ideas you will present and what order they will appear in.  The exact details will depend on what information you have gathered.  If I were writing this essay, I would want to talk about things like financial aid, counseling, and child care that would help young mothers go back to school.

At the end of the introduction, you need to have your thesis.  This is where you tell what argument you are trying to make.  I have not done extensive research on this subject, but I think that the main things that society could do to help young mothers would be to provide good child care at low cost along with financial aid.  So my thesis statement would be something like “Since a lack of money and a lack of affordable child care are major barriers to young mothers who want to return to school, society should help young mothers by providing financial aid and good, cheap facilities for their children while they are in class.”