This is what I have so far:
I think that the best electoral system is the first-past-the-post. The logic is very straight forward and simple: the candidate with the most votes wins. The voter is invited to choose a candidate from the list on the ballot paper and put an X against that person’s name. It is literally as easy as 1, 2, and 3. A taste for simplicity cannot last for long so I think that it’s best to take advantage of the few simple things in life when you cross roads with them. The first-past-the-post system has the benefit of being relatively straightforward, easy, and swift for the voters to understand. That is one of the reasons I think it is the best system.
Another reason I find the electoral system efficient is it permits voters to choose between people rather than just between parties. Voters can thoroughly appraise the performance of individual candidates presented by a party. The first-past-the-post system clears the murky waters and lets society see the clear reflection of the individual candidates. I think it’s very key for a voter to know the abilities and qualities of the possible candidates they might want to vote for.
© Jasreen Grade 11
I wouldn't worry about the introduction or the conclusion until you really get the body of your essay complete. What this example lacks (and as suggested above, would be fixed by an outline) is a clear argument. You have the beginning of what looks like a list of ideas. In an essay, lists are not a good thing. Consider the above a brainstorm. Continue brainstorming as many more ideas as you can possibly think of in the direction you are headed.
Group similar ideas together and lable them with category titles. These will become your body paragraphs and the "titles" will be topic sentences.
When you get this far, the bulk of the work is done and the intro and conclusion will be much easier.
The simplest way to begin your essay is to create an outline before you actually write the essay itself. You would help yourself understand the structure you want to create immensely by creating an outline. To do this, you will need to have:
- An Introduction which states the question you intend to answer (In your case, "Which electoral system is the best?"), and gives your thesis statement (In your case, the first sentence that you have written above.). One note of caution here: Your question implies that you must choose between several types of electoral systems. You should list and describe a few of the top contenders in your introductory paragraph.
- Depending on the length of your essay, three or four paragraphs, each of which lists and describes a reason for your choice. This is called the Body of your essay. In what you have submitted above, you have listed two reasons already, so these should each have their own paragraph of explanation.
- A Conclusion that restates your thesis or gives further consideration to the other possible electoral systems and explains how, though they are not your first choice, they might also provide a workable structure.
If you begin with this sort of outline, you will be very unlikely to become lost in how to begin or where to go next as you write.
Since you mention in your question that the beginning has you stumped, I have provided a link below with more details about writing an Introduction. Good luck!