How to read literature like a professor Write a free verse poem derived or inspired bycharacters or situations from greek mythology.so i wrote this poem form Aurora and Tithonus. Dear mortal of my love How unfruitfull has been my gift To grant thee immotality And case to grant thy youth to thee also My heart cannot behold this great mortification As it discerns the wearing of thy youth Thy once appealing beauty now dissolves in the age of mortaliy Thy glowing hair now white as snow Thy limbs once energetic now lie feeble My heart cannot withstand this misfortune So shall i bid thee goodbye. pls survey for inaccuracy punctuatin and grammar.    

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Capitalize "I" on the second to last line.  Also, consider adding some punctuation to the ends of the lines.  You have the period at the very end, but also consider putting a period or comma at the end of some of your other lines to complement the natural flow of...

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Capitalize "I" on the second to last line.  Also, consider adding some punctuation to the ends of the lines.  You have the period at the very end, but also consider putting a period or comma at the end of some of your other lines to complement the natural flow of the poem.  You misspelled 'unfruitful,' 'mortality,' and 'immortality.'  I also think "white as snow" is a little cliche; it's a vastly over-used comparison, so maybe you could find something from your greek characters' perspective that they are familiar with to compare the whiteness to.

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In line three, how did the speaker grant "immortality"? The object of the poem apparently is not immortal, so what happened? I understand that you said the gift was "unfruitful," but as a reader I need a little more to fully understand your point.

You have some good details and images in the second half of the poem.

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I don't really think the first line works. My "mortal love" might work better. I also am not sure about the word "case" in the fourth line. I'm not sure exactly what you mean. In the 7th row, do you mean "mortality" instead? Of course the I needs to be capitalized in the last line. Good job!
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