How do I write emotional and intellctual paragraphs on school reform?So, in my class were doing a persuasive essay on school reform. Were using the system of one ethical paragraph, one emotional...

How do I write emotional and intellctual paragraphs on school reform?

So, in my class were doing a persuasive essay on school reform. Were using the system of one ethical paragraph, one emotional paragraph, and one intellectual paragraph.  I'm having trouble with the intellectual and emotional paragraph because he says my language is too ethical. My teacher told me to start using emotional language and intellectual language. Can someone give me any ideas on what emotional and intellectual language sound like?

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Ashley Kannan eNotes educator| Certified Educator

I think that there might have to be some more clarification of specific terms here.  This might require you to open up some dialogue with your teacher.  In my mind, the idea of "emotional" language resides in the domain of a narrative where you are able to convey the need of school reform on an affective level.  The concept of "intellectual" language might refer to being able to speak from a position that is more cerebral in its approach to convincing the reader of the need for school reform.  I do think that there are a couple of approaches that might be pursued here.  One such angle is to ensure that when you are speaking of school reform, you speak of the need to advocate for it in terms of speaking of what the results would be of not adopting school reform.  For example, speaking of how democratic processes are impacted through faulty education might be persuasive on an intellectual level.   In advocating this, I might use some of the ideas in John Dewey's Democracy and Education. In this work, Dewey makes the argument that the advance of democracy is directly tied into reforms of the educational system.  Dewey's vision of progressive education sees learning as a process by which individuals are able to define problems, learn from one another in the process of critical thinking and assess and evaluate solutions.  This is democratic in its nature because students are active agents in their learning, something upon which democracy is dependent.  If individuals do not pursue school reform, this manner of learning is abandoned and, in the process, so is the vitality of democracy.  Examining Dewey's writing on this point could be extremely helpful.  When assessing the problem of school reform from an emotional standpoint, I would consider placing the reader in a situation where schools are so decrepit and in need of change that school reform is self- evident.  Examining the plight of rural schools in South Carolina, for example, might be something that can help here.  Placing the reader in schools where cinder blocks and plywood operate as science labs, or when freight train arrivals are so close to school classrooms that learning has to cease, and schools in which rodent infestation accompanies student attempts at learning are all instances where descriptive writing could allow the reader to feel the need, on an emotional level, the need to adopt school reform.

litteacher8 eNotes educator| Certified Educator
Maybe you should look at emotional as from the heart. Focus on raw emotion. How do you feel? You can use emotional appeals, such as focusing on how children are the future and we care about them. As for the intellectual, try focusing on straight facts and statistics with little emotion.