How could I start a story about a derelict houseThis must be a story about a derelict house where some children are playing

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engtchr5 | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Associate Educator

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Rusted wrought-iron gates and moss-laden oak trees were trademarks of the old Cooper place on Seventh Street. No one had lived there in years, and the city had offered to turn it into a motel of sorts about three years ago.

But the historic motel plans fell flat, and now it stood, covered with gang graffiti and antiquity. The curiosity behind the old place was its backstory: Old Man Cooper had allegedly killed three different wives inside the rickety, white-painted home, each with a different method of execution.

Knowing the local lore, Trudy, Ralph, and I all gathered there one day to explore its inner sanctum. It would become the worst mistake of our entire childhood...  

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ladyvols1 | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Senior Educator

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The house had stood empty for as long as I can remember. The wood had peeled and the color was washed from the sunlight.  The yard was as overgrown as an untended garden with weeds as high as my chest.  I had passed it everyday on my way to school, but this day was different, this day I could swear I heard noises coming from the back of the house.  It sounded like children.  Should I go and see what is going on, or should I just go to school?

This is a sample of a beginning of a story.  The idea is to grab the reader's interest in the first few sentences so that they will want to read more.  Make sure you use vivid adjectives and descriptive words.  Good Luck!

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writeratwork | eNotes Newbie

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Think of some synonyms for "derelict" as well as "house."  Try to incorporate them into your description.  Also think about:

What about the house makes it "derelict"?

Why is it in this condition?

What sort of environment is it in (a bad neighborhood, abandoned city, backwoods rustic, etc., etc.)?

What type of actions would SHOW us it is derelict?  A crumbling porch, roof cave-in, etc.?

 

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clnico13 | Student, Undergraduate | (Level 1) eNoter

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Rusted wrought-iron gates and moss-laden oak trees were trademarks of the old Cooper place on Seventh Street. No one had lived there in years, and the city had offered to turn it into a motel of sorts about three years ago.

But the historic motel plans fell flat, and now it stood, covered with gang graffiti and antiquity. The curiosity behind the old place was its backstory: Old Man Cooper had allegedly killed three different wives inside the rickety, white-painted home, each with a different method of execution.

Knowing the local lore, Trudy, Ralph, and I all gathered there one day to explore its inner sanctum. It would become the worst mistake of our entire childhood...  

thanks

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clnico13 | Student, Undergraduate | (Level 1) eNoter

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The house had stood empty for as long as I can remember. The wood had peeled and the color was washed from the sunlight.  The yard was as overgrown as an untended garden with weeds as high as my chest.  I had passed it everyday on my way to school, but this day was different, this day I could swear I heard noises coming from the back of the house.  It sounded like children.  Should I go and see what is going on, or should I just go to school?

This is a sample of a beginning of a story.  The idea is to grab the reader's interest in the first few sentences so that they will want to read more.  Make sure you use vivid adjectives and descriptive words.  Good Luck!

thanks

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