How can this introduction be improved for an essay on the novel To Kill A Mockingbird?General statement: A mockingbird is a symbol for people who have done nothing wrong but who are harmed by...

How can this introduction be improved for an essay on the novel To Kill A Mockingbird?

General statement: A mockingbird is a symbol for people who have done nothing wrong but who are harmed by society.

Connect the general statement to society: Based on reality, many people are very pure and do not commit any crimes or violence;those people are innocent. However, many of those people represent the mockingbirds because many of those people are innocents but are harmed by society even if they have done nothing wrong.

Connect societal statement to the text: The title of Harper Lee's novel To Kill a Mockingbird is significant in that while it is considered a sin to kill a mockingbird, Harper Lee tries to show the characters that resemble the mockingbirds throughout the novel.

 

I am writing an essay about mockingbirds in the novel To Kill a mockingbird by Harper Lee.SO THIS IS WHAT I HAVE ; IS THERE ANYTHING I SHOULD CHANGE IN IT?

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mizzwillie | Middle School Teacher | (Level 1) Senior Educator

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I'm not sure if you are to keep each piece of your essay introduction separated like you have it here or write it in one introduction paragraph.  The biggest problem I see is that the introduction you have is very general with few specifics especially the connect to society.  To Kill A Mockingbird by Harper Lee does use the mockingbird as a symbol, but you need to connect to society by showing the reality.  Where do you see pure people?  Pure is a very difficult word to show rather than tell.  What about using the idea of people around you who do good things with their talents or are good to the people around them?  I like your connection to the text; do you think it would be helpful to name the characters who resemble mockingbirds?  Then your body paragraphs could show how they are mockingbirds.  Good luck with your essay as you have some good ideas with which to work.

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