How can this analysis of Curley's Wife in Of Mice and Men be improved?
Thereafter Steinbeck uses the phrase like “leaned against the door frame” and “put her hands behind her back” to shows the danger just by her body language and her stance at the barn door. Which shows a woman who appears confident and a tease, from this I can infer that Curley’s Wife is very confident in seeking men’s attention and she is trying to get the attention of George and Lennie.
Moreover Steinbeck foreshadows danger by the quote “sunshine in the doorway was cut off” This quote is really metaphoric and suggest men's in the ranch losing hope.
Steinbeck relates the colour red to Curley’s wife repeatedly. Steinbeck does this because the colour red signifies danger as well as desire and passion. This reveals a lot about Curley’s wife character because it suggests how dangerous she is. This could be further evidence that Steinbeck disrespects women.
George and Lennie meet Curley’s wife at the barn for the first time. George and Lennie react differently toward her, this shown by Lennie who thinks she is “purty” but also George who sees danger. George foresees that Lennie's attraction to feminine softness will again cause trouble, and threaten their dream of a farm. The word “purty”
Steinbeck shows Curley’s Wife as an overdressed dangerous ‘jailbait’ which the men might admire but see that she is danger to them. This can only mean a promiscuous underage girl who can get men sentenced to prison on a felony count of statutory rape. She is overly made up and overly dressed for the ranch setting, suggesting that she looks like a young girl who is trying to look older and attractive.
This analysis could be improved grammatically in a few places. The subject and verb agreement is not always correct. "Steinbeck uses the phrase "leaned against the door frame" and . . . to show." You wrote "shows."
For the next sentence start it by saying "This shows . . . " instead of "which."
Put a period after "tease." Then a new sentence.
Second paragraph. Either get rid of or explain better how the quote foreshadows. The quote is not a metaphor. Metaphors make a comparison between two things. The quote may be symbolic, but it is not a metaphor.
Third paragraph. You've said that the color red is repeatedly associated with Curley's wife, but no specific examples are given. You've said what the color red indicates, but a few quotes from the text that show Curley's wife and red would do a lot for support.
4th paragraph -- the last 3 words are not a sentence. Finish the thought or delete it. The content of that paragraph is fine.