Hi there! Could you please tell me if I have any mistakes and if I do, could you please correct them. Thank you! :)  "EFFICIENCY.  Left atrial appendage ligation in patients with ischemic heart...

Hi there! Could you please tell me if I have any mistakes and if I do, could you please correct them. Thank you! :) 

"EFFICIENCY.  Left atrial appendage ligation in patients with ischemic heart disease atrial fibrillation when performing coronary artery  bypass surgery off-pump.

Introduction. Currently, atrial fibrillation (AF) - the most common heart rhythm disorder. The mortality rate in patients with AF is increased by 2 times the risk of stroke by 5 times. Ligation of the left atrial appendage is a promising approach to the prevention of stroke in atrial fibrillation during open surgery, but most studies conducted did not include patients who underwent coronary artery bypass grafting (CABG) off-pump.

Objective: To evaluate the effect of the LAA ligation in patients with CAD and AF during surgery CABG off-pump  in the incidence of stroke and mortality from stroke and overall mortality.

Material and Methods: The analysis of the results of 116 patients with coronary CAD and AF, which for the period from May 2009 to November 2013. FTSSSKH in Astrakhan CABG off pump performed off pump. The age of patients 62,2+ 5.8 years. Men were 101 (87%), 15 women (13%). The observation period average - 29+ 1.3 months. Exclusion criteria were patients with acute coronary syndrome, with conversion to rekshe, thrombosis of the left heart, with EF <35%, with hemodynamically significant lesion of the brachiocephalic vessels.Patients were divided into 2 groups: I group- 53 patients who at the time of CABG off pump performed epicardial LAA ligation, II group- 63 patients who remained intact LAA (control). The primary endpoints were stroke, mortality from stroke and total mortality. Stroke was confirmed by clinic, CT and / or MRI of the brain. For statistical analysis method used raspredelniya signs Group criterion X2.

Results: The incidence of stroke in the early postoperative period in group II was 6.3% in group I -0%; in the late postoperative period -9.5% and 0%, respectively. Mortality from stroke in the early postoperative period in both groups were not, in the long term - from the mortality rate of stroke was 4.8% in group II, 0% in the group. Overall mortality was 3.2% and 0%, respectively, in the early postoperative period, in the long - Overall mortality was 9.5% in group II, 5.7% - in group I (p> 0.05).

findings:

1. CHD patients with AF LAA ligation during CABG off-pump is a safe procedure.

2. Implementation of the LAA ligation during CABG off-pump significantly reduces the risk of stroke, both in early and in the late postoperative period and mortality from stroke in the late postoperative period. Overall mortality in the long term is uncertain lower in the group with ligation of LAA. "

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I've italicized your original, and used Roman type for comments.

"EFFICIENCY.  Left atrial appendage ligation in patients with ischemic heart disease atrial fibrillation when performing coronary artery  bypass surgery off-pump.

Omit initial quotation mark. Do you mean "efficiency" or "effectiveness of"?

Introduction. Currently, atrial fibrillation (AF) - the most common heart rhythm disorder.

This is not a sentence. Replace the "-" with the word "is" to make it a grammatical sentence.

The mortality rate in patients with AF is increased by 2 times the risk of stroke by 5 times.

You have two independent clauses in here. You need a coordinating conjunction between them. Also, this is an open-ended comparative. 

Ligation of the left atrial appendage is a promising approach to the prevention of stroke in atrial fibrillation during open surgery, ...

"stroke in atrial fibrillation": Do you mean "prevention of stroke in patients who experience atrial fibrillation"?

Objective: To evaluate the effect of the LAA ligation in patients with CAD and AF during surgery CABG off-pump  in the incidence of stroke and mortality from stroke and overall mortality.

-- "surgery CABG": Do you mean CABG surgery? In English, adjectives go before rather than after nouns.

-- "in the incidence": should read "on the incidence"

Material and Methods: The analysis of the results of 116 patients with coronary CAD and AF, which for the period from May 2009 to November 2013.

Sentence fragment. Perhaps rephrase as "This study analyzes ... " and delete "which for", a construction never used in English.

FTSSSKH in Astrakhan CABG off pump performed off pump.

Sentence fragment.

The age of patients 62,2+ 5.8 years. Men were 101 (87%), 15 women (13%).

Again, more sentence fragments. For average, specify mean or median. The second sentence could be clearer if you said "Of the 116 patients studied, 101 (87%) were male ... " Is there a reason for the lack of gender balance? Does this mean that results of the study are not statistically significant for women? 

Exclusion criteria were patients with acute coronary syndrome, with conversion to rekshe, thrombosis of the left heart, with EF <35%, with hemodynamically significant lesion of the brachiocephalic vessels.

Edit to correct parallelism errors.

Materials and Results sections:

Either use bullet points or edit sentence fragments to entire sentences. "raspredelniya" is not an English word. Check with a fellow medical professionals to figure out the English usage here. What will be especially important is the method you use to show if your results are actually significant.

Mortality from stroke in the early postoperative period in both groups were not, in the long term - from the mortality rate of stroke was 4.8% in group II, 0% in the group.

This doesn't really make sense as a sentence. Mortality rates were not what? Are you saying that mortality rates were 4.8% in Group II and 0% in Group I? 

1. CHD patients with AF LAA ligation during CABG off-pump is a safe procedure.

Do you mean "For CHD patients?" This needs a comma after "AF."

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