How do I write the most precise and simple as possible?

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austengirl1 | College Teacher | (Level 1) Adjunct Educator

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Hello again! I will try and answer your questions and provide some links for you so that you have examples to look at.

Thesis statements: Don't pose it as a question. Thesis statements make a declarative statement that you then set out to prove. When you ask a question, it may confuse your readers as to what you want to argue, or it may make it seem as if you're unsure of what you're arguing.

Topic sentences: Try to avoid the use of "I." When you make a declarative statment like "Gay marriage can increase..." that it is your opinion is implied. When you use "I," it draws the attention away from your idea and onto you as the person or author. You always want your readers' attention on your ideas that you are arguing.

Evidence: You may use first, second, third, etc...to emphasize the order of your evidence. However, strong transition sentences will link the evidence together as well.

Conclusions: This is where you get to pull everything together and show your reader the "so what?". Show them how gay marriage leading to more stable communities will benefit their lives. Restate your argument, but really drive home how your argument matters to your reader. Simply regurgitating your thesis or your intro is redundant, so add something new to the mix.

 

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austengirl1 | College Teacher | (Level 1) Adjunct Educator

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The most important things to concentrate on in essay writing are meeting the requirements of the assignment and communicating these ideas you have to your reader in a way that your reader can process them.

The best place to begin, since you already know what you wish to write about, is with a thesis statement, also known as a claim. In one or two sentences, write down the main idea that you want to communicate to your reader. For example, if you want to write about legalizing gay marriage, you might begin with a statement like "Gay marriage and the structuring of a family unit will increase the emotional and economic well being of local communities." In this way, you're showing the reader what you want to argue or prove in your essay.  

Then create an outline. With your thesis in mind outline the first point (also called a topic sentence) you want to discuss. Make sure that this point helps your reader to understand your thesis better. For example, if you've mentioned gay marriage in the context of community stability, then all your points must substantiate this claim. So you could write a paragraph about the economic benefits of gay marriage (increased access to insurance for partners would mean less strain on the medical industry). Just remember that your topic sentences need to directly relate to your thesis.

Once you have a topic sentence (that expresses the main idea of that paragraph), fill in supporting details as evidence. If you start listing anything that doesn't fit with your topic sentence, delete it.

Repeat this until you have an outline that looks like this:

I. Thesis statement

II. Body paragraph #1-Topic sentence

           a. supporting evidence

III. Body paragraph #2-Topic sentence

           a. supporting evidence

Repeat as necessary. By creating on outline, you can make sure that your evidence listed all relates to your topic sentences and that your topic sentences all relate to and further illustrate your thesis statement. Then when you go to write out the essay, you have a roadmap to keep you clearly focused. Good luck!

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jonnas | Student, Grade 11 | eNotes Newbie

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Thands a lot Austengirl,

your answer was very clear and helpful.

so it is clear the outline is very important, or even the key to a succesful essay.

but i still have a few ambiguities:

  I. Thesis statement  (can i put it in the form of a question?ex: can Gay marriage increase the emotional and economic well being of local communities?)

II. Body paragraph #1-Topic sentence ( can i use the sentence form: i think that Gay marriage.../ or shall i put a simplce sentence representing my opinion?ex: Gay marriage can increase...

           a. supporting evidence ( can i put this evidence as: first.., second.. or would it be very formal?)

III. Body paragraph #2-Topic sentence

           a. supporting evidence

Another important issue is the conclusion how and what to put in it.

i hope i'm not disturbing you or that i'm asking a lot, but if ever you have any succesful essais i'd like that you send them to me as examples if possible.

thanks.

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