I have a thesis for the short story " Lamb to the Slaughter" by Roald Dahl : In the story, Mary Maloney, a good wife becomes a murderer because of her husband's betrayal. I don't know it is good...

I have a thesis for the short story " Lamb to the Slaughter" by Roald Dahl : In the story, Mary Maloney, a good wife becomes a murderer because of her husband's betrayal.

I don't know it is good or bad. Could you give me your comment ? Thanks!

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sciftw | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Educator Emeritus

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Your thesis is fine. I have no problems with it.  It makes a clear statement of opinion about the story.  Your thesis statement is also defensible based on the events of the story.  

I would like to recommend that the flow of your thesis statement be cleaned up a bit.  Your thesis makes the claim that Mary Maloney is a good wife who turns into a murderer.  I think you are right, and I like how it forces you, the writer, to focus on two aspects of Mary.  You will have to focus on her being a good wife and support that.  You will then have to focus on why she is a murderer (vs. a person who is guilty of manslaughter).  I think the flow of your thesis can be cleaned up some.  

Because your thesis focuses on two aspects of Mary, I recommend using a thesis statement that starts with the word "although."  Starting with that subordinating conjunction forces you into a two part statement.  "Although Mary Maloney is clearly a good wife, her husband's betrayal transforms her into a murderer."   It's still your thesis, just tightened up a bit. 

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