Hey everyone! I'm having trouble with my essay introduction. I'm supposed to be writing about the loss of innocence in three books, Jane Eyre by Charlotte Bronte, The Catcher in The Rye by J.D. Salinger, and the short story “The First Day” by Edward P. Jones. I want to say that the loss of innocence is due to society's harsh ideals. Here is my introduction so far: In society, there comes a time in one's life when innocence is lost as a result of an experience or a gain of knowledge. This catharsis in one's life is unavoidable, and can be urged due to the accredited ideals of society. When one is not adequate to society’s ideal, society tries to conform them into their ways, corrupting their innocence. This is exemplified in the novel Jane Eyre by Charlotte Bronte, The Catcher in The Rye by J.D. Salinger, and the short story “The First Day” by Edward P. Jones. The recognition of the flaws of society, highlights an emotional juxtaposition between one's innocence, and the truth of growing up. The harsh reality of society’s callous notion for one to adhere to it’s ideals, leads to the prevailing deprivation of innocence. My thesis is bolded. I'd like to make my thesis stronger. I'm not really sure how to talk about the loss of innocence in Jane Eyre, so if anyone can give me some examples of the loss of innocence in Jane Eyre, that would greatly appreciated. Furthermore, how can I form a thesis that closely highlights the loss of innocence due to the harsh reality of society's expectations? Do you think my thesis and introduction are okay? If anyone could help me out with this, help would be much appreciated!
Jane Eyre is my favorite novel, so it's a pleasure to help you write about it in your essay . I normally tell students to try and avoid generic phrases using the word "society" because it can seem very vague and generic. The way to try and use more exacting language is to ask yourself what you mean when you refer to "society" and its expectations. Do you mean a specific culture at a specific time and place? Are you referring to the different socioeconomic groups that make up society and how social expectations differ among classes? Certainly the issue of class is an important one...
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