Is the following combined sentence grammatically correct?1. Such modern examples recall an earlier time. 2. A name was a real part of one's identity then. 3. It was not just an identifying label....

Is the following combined sentence grammatically correct?

1. Such modern examples recall an earlier time.

2. A name was a real part of one's identity then.

3. It was not just an identifying label.

 

The combined version is:

Such modern examples recall an earlier time when a name was a real part one's identity then and not just an identity label.

 

it might sound a little better as follows:

Such modern examples recall an earlier time when a name was a real part one's identity, not just an identity label.

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mwestwood | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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The second combination is preferable to the first combination of the three simple sentences.  But, perhaps you may wish to revise this second version with the addition of the word and after the comma.  For example,

Such modern examples recall an earlier time when a name was a real part of one's identity, and not just an identity label.

If it is possible for you to add words for clarity, you may want to rephrase  the last part of the sentence as in this example:

Such modern examples recall an earlier time when a name was a real part of one's identity, and not just a label to identify people. 

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james2011 | Student, Grade 9 | (Level 1) Honors

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I am not clear why "and" is needed for "and not just an identity label". Without "add", "not just an identtity label" would function as an appositive phase for "a real part of one's identity", which I consider sounding better when I read it through.

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