My Father is a lion. He is the leader of the pack. He keeps the pride together. He rules the Kingdom. He is fast, happy and adventurous man. He never gives up until he gets what he wants and his appetite is sated. Like a true king in the wild, my father loves to roam the outdoors. His strong attributes inspire others to be amazing. His strength affects everyone he encounters. His ambition to chase down his dreams and his hunger to make everyone successful never ends. He is always successful, always standing strong when he roars and his roar is always heard. It is loud. It is clear. No one misunderstands when he roars. When everyone is sleeping, he prowls around his pride sensing for danger. He will always hunt the truth. He will always protect his fellow lions in the animal kingdom. He is the king of the jungle.
I suggest using short, clipped sentences which denote aggression. This will help promote the theme of the lion. Keep out modifying words such as "seems to". Instead be confident about what you are saying, like a lion would be. Overall, good job.