Given the context of Orwell's Animal Farm, does the word subordinate fit into the context listed below?
"I see the village free from its slavery and tyranny of Gods. Everyone is happy, filled with warmth, dignity and are not the subordinate anymore."
The narrative is based on Animal Farm by George Orwell and the sentence above is like the description of Old Major's dream.
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The redescription of Old Major's vision has much in way of potential. I think that there are a couple of elements that need to be addressed, including the use of the word "subordinate." The first sentence needs to be altered a bit. I think that you want to replace "tyranny of Gods" with "tyranny of human beings." Old Major is more critical of the world of humans than of the divine. He might see the humans seeing themselves as "Gods," but I think that the sentence is stronger with the idea of "tyranny of human beings. The second sentence is, of course, our primary focus. I like its use, but it does need to be reworded. You could go with, "...dignity and are not the subordinates to anyone." The use of the word here is as a classification and not as a verb. The original sentence has it as a verb and I think that you will be better off rewording the sentence to use it as a noun. In this, you would want to say that the animals are not "subordinates to anyone." In this way, I think that you are able to effectively capture an essence of Old Major's vision in a reworded manner.
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