could someone help me reword this and tell me if it was difficult please? Summarize - The twenties were the years when drinking was against the law, and the law was a bad joke because everyone...
could someone help me reword this and tell me if it was difficult please?
Summarize - The twenties were the years when drinking was against the law, and the law was a bad joke because everyone knew of a local bar where liquor could be had. They were the years when organized crime ruled the cities, and the police seemed powerless to do anything against it. Classical music was forgotten while jazz spread throughout the land, and men like Bix Beiderbecke, Louis Armstrong, and Count Basie became the heroes of the young. The flapper was born in the twenties, and with her bobbed hair and short skirts, she symbolized, perhaps more than anyone or anything else, America's break with the past. From Kathleen Yancey, English 102 Supplemental Guide (1989): 25.
A decade marked by social and cultural upheaval, the 1920's--the Roaring Twenties, as it became known--ushered in the Eighteenth Amendment and Prohibition. But, with inadequate numbers of police to enforce this behavioral law, organized crime was afforded the opportunity for a profitable market in the transportation and sale of illegal liquor; moreover, as this market grew, the criminal element expanded, even to the point of controlling big cities through bribery of officials and other forms of corruption. Along with this relaxation of social mores, women freed themselves from restrictive clothing and hairstyles; consequently, these "flappers" of bobbed hair and short skirts came to symbolize an era in America that had broken with the past. Also discarded from the culture was classical music as a new art form known as jazz prevailed throughout the land, and musicians such as Bix Beiderbecke, Louis Armstrong, and Count Basie became the superstars of the young. In fact, this music that accompanied peoples' freedom of expression gave rise to F. Scott Fitzgerald's naming the era The Jazz Age.
Since this is for a college course, some additional information was added in an effort to fully develop ideas.
re: level of difficulty:
Probably the most challenging for the student would be the re-organizing of ideas in order to give the paragraph more coherency.
After this, there would be, at least, moderate difficulty in structuring the sentences with appropriate word choice ("bad joke" is too informal), variety, insertion of more development of idea (e.g. providing explanations of ideas, and adding a concluding sentence), and transitions.
The 1920's was a time of great change known as the Roaring Twenties. Prohibition, the 18th amendment, banned drinking, however it was easy to access alcohol and the law was seen as ineffective and silly. Organized crime, known as political machines, were spread throughout the cities with no one to stop them. Music changed from classic to jazz as well as the fashion style that people had acquired. Women now had short bobs and wore short skirts.
I added some vocabulary I had learned from US history this year, but I hope this helps.