Please give me suggestions about how to improve this essay about the ideas portrayed in a TV show? Body paragraph 4&5: The other attitudes this episode introduces are facing emotions and relationship...

Please give me suggestions about how to improve this essay about the ideas portrayed in a TV show?

Body paragraph 4&5:

The other attitudes this episode introduces are facing emotions and relationship issues. Creators of “Moby Dick” episode [Removed by Staff to protect against Internet plagiarism.]

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Again, these two paragraphs are well organized but do have some minor problems.  The content is fine, so if you clean up the writing you will have good paragraphs.  Some problems include:

  • “Facing emotions” and “relationship issues” are not “attitudes.”  So you need to say something like “Other issues that this episode…”
  • In the next sentence, I...

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