Can you please edit/revise thisThe Nullification Crisis would have tested the skills of any leader. Although the crisis was a definite challenge, Andrew Jackson handled it professionally. When...

Can you please edit/revise this

The Nullification Crisis would have tested the skills of any leader. Although the crisis was a definite challenge, Andrew Jackson handled it professionally. When South Carolina threatened to separate from the union and form its own army, Jackson’s use of military through the Force Bill, ensured that South Carolina could not separate. When South Carolina backed down, he worked swiftly to reduce the tariff. Through Jackson’s determination, the North agreed to lower the tariff and South Carolina agreed to enforce it. Jackson demonstrated his leadership and the power of the federal over the state governments. For this, he deserves an "A"

Can you edit/revise this to make it more formal and make it sound better.
Also, in the beginning of the paragraph, how can I say that the  southerners hated the Tariff of 1828 and the northerners liked it, and the tariff basically caused south carolina to do the nullification. 

Thanks
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Ashley Kannan eNotes educator| Certified Educator

I think that you are off to a good start here.  Instead of calling it a "professional" handling, I might indicate that Jackson's handling proved the strength of the executive branch.  Since you are giving him an "A" as a grade, I think that his handling of it probably goes a bit beyond mere "professionalism."  I also think that right after that opening sentence, you could include the information about the Tariff of 1828, why it was passed, and the reaction to it.  Here, the information about South Carolina's disdain could be integrated.  At the same time, I think you need to make it clear that Jackson's strength was not merely determination, but actually being able to pass the Force Bill and marshal the federal troops to ensure that South Carolina does not secede and attempt to "one up" the President. I think making some of these changes will bring a bit more focus and harnessed energy to the paragraph.

grammargirlie2000 eNotes educator| Certified Educator

Most leaders would have been tested by the Nullification Crisis. Although this turning point was a definite challenge, Andrew Jackson handled this predicament professionally. When South Carolina threatened to separate from the Union and form its own army, Jackson’s use of military through the Force Bill ensured that there would be no division between these two states. When South Carolina retracked from military force, Jackson worked swiftly to reduce the tariff in return. Through Jackson’s determination, the North agreed to lower the tariff, and South Carolina agreed to enforce it. Jackson demonstrated his leadership, and the power of the federal over the state governments. For superior example of leadership, he deserves an "A".