Can this be a good thesis statement?: In Lord of the Flies, Jack's hunting paralle's Golding's negative views towards war?My teacher has given us an analytical essay to write and I'm trying to...

Can this be a good thesis statement?: In Lord of the Flies, Jack's hunting paralle's Golding's negative views towards war?

My teacher has given us an analytical essay to write and I'm trying to write about how Jack can be a symbol of the typical army soilder. Or Golding's feelings about war. I'm not really getting anywhere with my thesis, so can someone help me create a new one?

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mwestwood | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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In concurrence with the idea that Jack can be compared to the soldier, he is particularly similar to the mercenary type, who fights and kills for gain and the enjoyment in killing.  For, more of the innate savagery is in the mercenary as in Jack and, especially, Roger.

Perhaps, by placing your focus upon the second idea--that of Golding's attitude toward war as a corruptive condition that encourages and invites the innate savagery of man (with a little rewording, this can be a thesis)--you can demonstrate how Jack and especially Roger degenerate and become uncivilized, savage, and even evil. For, instance, once Jack comes into competition with Ralph for leadership, he and the hunters steal the fire, brutally force SamnEric into being with their group, etc. 

 As the previous post has encouraged you, peruse the novel again, focusing on Jack's words and actions in passages that will support this theme of war as a corrupting influence for savagery and evil, or the one that you choose. (read the enotes character analysis of Jack.) 

Good luck! 

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coachingcorner | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Senior Educator

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The idea of William Golding's negative views towards war as presented in his novel 'Lord of the Flies' is an interesting and stimulating one - it would be a pity to ditch it altogether as it is fairly unusual. Could you not just simplify your thesis title to just that? (Elements of William Golding's negative views of war as presented in Lord of the Flies.) It would be very fulfilling and fairly routine to just re-read the novel and make notes of every negative image/speech/event you notice so you can describe it more detail in your final copy. Use this site and all other good sources, cite them well and keep notes of your page references - I think it would be a good basis for a thesis statement. That final image of the naval officer is such a good conclusion.

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xparamorex | Student, Grade 9 | eNotes Newbie

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Re-written thesis: In Lord of the Flies, Golding uses imagery to present his view against war with Jack and Roger.
I have a sneaking feeling that I'm missing something in this statement... I know that I want to demonstrate how Golding uses Jack and Roger as a mercenary soilder type who lose their civilness and take on a road of savagery, but I also want to know the differences of Jack and Ralph. How, using imagery, Jack is dark and Ralph is light.

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