Can someone please check my grammar?Ferry spoke about three order of ideas. Frist, the economic benefit, he said that France needs foreign markets to sell its industrial products because the U.S...

Can someone please check my grammar?

Ferry spoke about three order of ideas. Frist, the economic benefit, he said that France needs foreign markets to sell its industrial products because the U.S had taken a position of protectionism. At this time, France had no more markets to expand in Europe because the competition was hard. Second, Expand civilization and its highest sense, he believed that Europeans are a superior race and they have a duty to spread their supreme civilization. Third, political patriotism, he said that in order to protect the interest of the nation, France needs to expand their military power. He also believed that France should not be just a free country but a great country.

Roosevelt's argument on imperialism was in order to become a great nation the U.S needs to get involved in world politics. Otherwise the U.S will get recolonized. he also said that it is Americans's duty to civilize the "savage anarcist" living in the land that they have gained from Spain.

Opponents of the Roosevelt's arguments believed that becomming imperial power clash with the nations commitment to liberty and freedom. Roosevelt argued that if they are taking such doctrine at its core, it would be like condemning U.S founding fathers from ever having settled in the U.S

 

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booboosmoosh | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Educator Emeritus

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Below, I have bolded my changes, as well as a question I have to clarify the sentence in question. Some changes reflect a word change or the corrected spelling of a word, so compare your original the the adjustments carefully. If the first letter of a sentence is bolded, it means it must be capitalized. The first paragraph, noting the three orders of ideas, has several changes (and there are a few later in your piece) that changes the verb tense. If you are speaking of the past, it is best when reporting facts (as opposed to writing a creative piece: poem, short story, etc.) to stick to the past tense.

Pay special attention to punctuation that is bolded: it may not show up as clearly as the words do.  Good luck! Hope this helps.

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Ferry spoke about three orders of ideas. Frist, the economic benefit: he said that France needed foreign markets to which it could sell its industrial products because the U.S had taken a position of protectionism. At this time, France had no more markets to expand in Europe because the competition was fierce. Second, expand civilization and its highest sense: he believed that Europeans were a superior race and they had a duty to spread their supreme civilization. Third, political patriotism: he said that in order to protect the interest of the nation, France needed to expand its military power. He also believed that France should not be just a free country but a great country.

Roosevelt's argument on imperialism was that in order to become a great nation, the U.S needed to get involved in world politics. Otherwise the U.S. would be recolonized. He also said that it was America's duty to civilize the "savage anarcist" living in the land that they had gained from Spain.

Opponents of the Roosevelt's arguments believed that becoming an imperial power clashed with the nation's commitment to liberty and freedom. Roosevelt argued that if they were adopting such doctrine at its (whose core?) core, it would be like condemning the United States' founding fathers for ever having settled in the U.S.

 

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mwestwood | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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Parallelism is an important component of any writing, for the balance that it provides affords the reader understanding.  When a listing is made, such as yours in which you write, "First, Second, and Third," you need to be sure that the phrases that follow are all of the same grammatical form.  So, with this in mind, the phrase after "Second" should be changed to expansion of civilization since the other two are nouns--economic benefit and political patiotism.  Also, you may wish to use Secondly and Thirdly rather than "Second" and "Third" as these words are more commonly used.  The sentence will be more grammatically accurate if you insert regarding before the noun phrases.

 e.g. Secondly, regarding the expansion of civilization and its highest sense Roosevelt [reiterate the name for clarity after using he a couple of times] believed that Europeans.... 

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