Can anyone read over my thesis?
Can anyone read over my thesis and tell me what they think? The prompt was to write how Golding used literary devices to comment about his thoughts on human nature in The Lord of the Flies in order to convey his purpose.
In this passage of The Lord of the Fly, Golding uses literary devices to reveal his belief that humans have a tendency to cause destruction and chaos, especially towards themselves, in order to persuade human civilization to embrace peace and to eradicate anything that would disrupt it.
A thesis is the controlling idea of an entire essay; it controls the essay by providing an analytical argument that is worth developing because it offers something interesting and significant; however, to ensure its development, it must be narrowed in its focus; therefore, it must avoid generalizations such as "all," none," and "every" for they make it difficult to prove your point. Furthermore, a thesis must avoid vague and undefined terms, such as "things," "aspects,"and "certain" for they do not clarify your point or direction. Therefore, the thesis must be clearly worded and emphatically stated, so it must avoid weakening devices such as "I think" or "In my opinion."
Your thesis is sound as far as an argument is concerned; however, you need to proofread a bit. First, Since Lord of the Flies is a novel, the title must be underlined, and "Fly" should be "Flies." Secondly, it would behoove you to list the literary devices that Golding uses in the passage you are analyzing so that they provide you with an outline for the body of your essay.