Can anyone help me reword this sentence? I took the initiative to learn about college on my own by spending countless hours looking through college websites and spending time discussing colleges...

Can anyone help me reword this sentence?

I took the initiative to learn about college on my own by spending countless hours looking through college websites and spending time discussing colleges with teachers and friends.

 

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mwestwood eNotes educator| Certified Educator

 

To learn about colleges, I took the initiative by browsing many college websites and by discussing various colleges with both teachers and friends.

  1. The use of infinitive phrases or participial or gerund phrases as sentence openers is often helpful to subordinate ideas in a longer sentence. 
  2. Parallelism is also useful for succinctness and reader understanding.  For instance, the gerund phrase "by spending countless hours looking through college websites" is not parallel to "spending time discussing colleges with teachers and friends," so it is not as balanced and comprehensible as using by with each gerund phrase.
  3. Reducing any wordiness is also helpful.
readerofbooks eNotes educator| Certified Educator

Here are a few suggestions:

I took out a few redundant words, but kept the structure.

1. I took the initiative to learn about colleges by spending time looking through college websites, and discussing college life with teachers and friends.

 Here is another variation, actually the top sentence just inverted.

2. By spending countless hours on college website and by discussing college life with teachers and friends, I took the initiative to learn about college.

Here is another variation in sense.

3. I took the initiative to learn about college by looking through websites, consulting teachers and talking to my friends.