Can anyone help me rephrase these sentences? "Your patronage and help is greatly appreciated. Would you help us improve by answering a few questions?"I just need help rephrasing it please.

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Original: “Your patronage and help is greatly appreciated. Would you help us improve by answering a few questions?” Improved: (Not sure what is meant by "patronage and help") “Your patronage is greatly appreciated. Could you answer a few short questions to help us improve our service?” This standard request for filling out a questionnaire can be made more personal with some clause like: “We want your experience here to always be pleasant, and we are attentive to your needs and wishes…” etc., but the longer the request, the less often a patron will take the time to fill it out. Perhaps a light-hearted tone and a multiple-choice questionnaire would get more responses: You dined here now—(or whatever) Was it: Atrocious?_____ Bearable?______ Mildly pleasant?_____ Epicurean?_______ Ecstatic?_____ What was worse? The service?______ The food?_______ The price?_______ The annoying questionnaire?______ The point is: we’d like you to come again! What can we do to make you want to do that?________________________________

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