Do the following paragraphs stay on topic?Bottle Feeding Breast Milk   Bottles for kids use to be so simple. Your choices were between purchasing glass bottles or plastic varieties. Today, there's...

Do the following paragraphs stay on topic?

Bottle Feeding Breast Milk

 

Bottles for kids use to be so simple. Your choices were between purchasing glass bottles or plastic varieties. Today, there's more choices, and a quantity of them can be confusing. Some have great benefits, but can be harder to wash, and others are simple to take care of but can also give your infant issues. Think about what you require the most in a bottle and then select what you ought to make use of. Buy infant bottles that fit in to your lifestyle and that work the best for your tiny.

 

You can go out and buy infant bottles like the ones that have been on the shelves for a very long time. These are simple bottles with a bottle for the food, a nipple, and a ring to keep the nipple on the bottle. There's still glass versions of these around, but they are not as common as they one time were. You may must buy infant bottles of glass by shopping on the Net. Otherwise, you do require to find some that are BPA free, which is a safer plastic. Some plastics can put chemicals in to baby's food, which is not what you require. Most are made BPA free

Sources:

http://www.breastfeeding-and-alcohol.info/index.html

http://www.breastfeeding-and-alcohol.info/Breast-milk-storage.html

http://www.breastfeeding-and-alcohol.info/Bottle-feeding-breast-milk.html

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litteacher8 | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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I suggest inserting another paragraph before these two, and using it to introduce your topic and give background. If the purpose of your essay is to explain that you can give a baby breast milk in a bottle, and there are many excellent bottles, these could work.
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vangoghfan | College Teacher | (Level 2) Educator Emeritus

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__________ [insert a verb here; hint: use a verb form of "choices," which comes later. ] Bottles for kids use to be so simple. Your choices were between purchasing glass bottles or plastic varieties. Today, there's more choices, and a quantity of them can be confusing. Some have great benefits, but can be harder to wash, and others are simple to take care of but can also give your infant issues. [choose a stronger word] In order to ______ _____    _________  ___________  [fill in appropriate words], Think about what you require the most in a bottle and then select what you ought to make use of [cut all this and replace it with one adverb]. Buy infant bottles that fit in to your lifestyle and that work the best for your tiny ______ [word missing here].

 

You can go out and buy infant bottles like the ones that have been on the shelves for a very long time. These are simple bottles with a bottle for the food, a nipple, and a ring to keep the nipple on the bottle. There's still glass versions of these around, but they are not as common as they one time [replace this two words with one word] were. You may must buy infant bottles [insert a verb here] of glass by shopping on the Net. Otherwise, you do require [cut these words and replace them with a three-letter word the begins with "T." It means "attempt."] to find some that are BPA free, which is a safer plastic. Some plastics can put chemicals in to ____ [a short word is missing here] baby's food, which is not what you require. Most are made BPA free.

I agree with the comments above. In my feedback here, I've tried to call your attention to some other problems. I've boldfaced some words that need to be changed, and in some cases I have suggested changes.  Good luck!

 

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stolperia | (Level 1) Educator Emeritus

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You could look at the challenges of finding locations to pump, methods of storing expressed milk, and the amount of time and storage temperature and other factors that need to be considered when storing expressed milk. This wouldn't even take into account the attitude of employers and/or coworkers toward someone wanting to express breast milk for later feeding via bottle to an infant.

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pohnpei397 | College Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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I agree with the previous post.  Your paragraphs really have very little to do with using breast milk in particular.  They have, instead, only to do with selecting bottles.  This is part of bottle feeding a baby using breast milk, but it equally applies to feeding with formula.  You need to be more focused on the breast milk aspect if that is really your topic.

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clairewait | High School Teacher | (Level 1) Educator Emeritus

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I'm going to suggest that if the title (Bottle Feeding Breastmilk) is the topic for these paragraphs, then no, you do not stay on topic.  Your paragraphs seem to talk all about the different kinds of bottle available for feeding, but have nothing to do with using a bottle to feed a baby breast milk.

In order to stay on topic with your title, you could instead talk about how it is possible to bottle feed a baby breastmilk, or the possible benefits of doing this.  In such a paragraph (or short essay) you could include information about pumping and storing breast milk, and the difference (or potential difficulty) of finding bottles which most closely resemble a mother's nipple.  As a topic, this is one that is especially relevant today, as breastfeeding (and "mother's milk") is once again very highly recommended as the healthiest option for infants, but many mothers are working mothers and must figure out ways to make this work.  There is plenty of information available.  You might start by looking at the website for the La Leche League.

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accessteacher | High School Teacher | (Level 3) Distinguished Educator

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Are you asking us if bottlefeeding breast milk is acceptable or whether women should just breastfeed normally? I am not sure what you wish us to discuss in this posting. Certainly, I think that women should be allowed to breastfeed their children naturally, but that there is no problem with bottlefeeding breast milk. Of course many mothers do express their breast milk so that their partners can feed the baby at night to hopefully enable them to gain more sleep.

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