Is my revised thesis adequately stated to address relevant concers, which is listed below?Akannan: I am not sure I fully understood your feedback in a previous question regarding my thesis. Belowis...

Is my revised thesis adequately stated to address relevant concers, which is listed below?

Akannan: I am not sure I fully understood your feedback in a previous question regarding my thesis. Belowis my revised thesis. Have I adequately addressed your concerns?

Revised Thesis: Buddhists and Hindus discipline the body through abstinence, yoga and mediation as a means to achieve happiness and serentiy.

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Ashley Kannan eNotes educator| Certified Educator

I understand the complexity and the confusion.  I think a couple of things need to be addressed.  I like the reworded thesis.  I think that it might be more along the lines of where Hinduism and Buddhism might be.  I am not even sure your original thesis was wrong.  Yet, I simply wanted to make the argument that the notion of Nirvana is not one where an individual can directly "strive" for it.  Such a directed end is not what the Buddhists seek and not what the master sought.  When he focused on being "enlightened," I think that he realized that one cannot directly seek something or aspire to such a condition.  Rather, one must simply be and understand that the elevation of consciousness is a condition rooted in process and not product.  In this light, I think that my original point was that the idea of "trying to achieve Nirvana" is not something that a Buddhist can strive towards.  It is a condition that happens through process, not a directed end.  It was a subtle point, but one that I thought needed to be made.  The reworded thesis is much more understanding towards this end.