Okay, I have three days to spit out a good extemporaneous speech. We had to pick a question to answer. My question is: Should parental consent be required for abortions for those under 18? I feel strongly about both sides of it. I kind of want to put both of my opinions in the speech but don't know how to exactly. And I need a thesis statement. And could you tell me if this attention-getter is good? ---- Everything is all dark, cozy, and warm. You are in the most comfortable environment you've ever known. Everything is pure bliss as you are currently living in Utopia. Then in one violent moment, you feel the greatest amount of pain imaginable and you can see this blinding light and then your limbs are ripped apart from your body and you are now struggling to survive and then in one quick snap of a rubber band, it's all over. Your life is done. Your only thought was 'mommy, how could you do this to me'
I think your attention grabber might be a bit too graphic. Consider that some in your audience may have had or know someone who has had an abortion. It will be difficult for them to pay attention to your speech after such a vivid opening. You might also consider that this is a very Pro-Life argument. Many people don't believe that a fetus would be able to think or feel. You may want to take a more objective point of view for your presentation. This is easily a very heated topic. Your audience will be much more receptive if you stick to facts and objective opinions rather than dramatic imagery.
pohnpei's advice is good. It anticipates two of the biggest objections you are likely to receive from people who disagree with you. It's helpful to anticipate the kinds of counterarguments your opponents are likely to make and to "head them off at the pass."
I agree with both of the previous posts. This opening is not one that shows any sympathy for the other side of the story. In addition, it assumes that a fetus has consciousness. If it does, then the whole rationale for allowing abortion goes out the window.
Finally, I would point out that this opening has only to do with the issue of abortion. It has nothing to do with the issue of parental notification. So, if you are doing your speech on the issue of notification (separate from that of abortion in general) you need a different opening.
I would agree with the above post. While you stated that you feel strongly about both sides, your opening statements prove to be very one-sided. The opening of your speech, if you feel torn between both sides, needs to show that.
The subject of abortion is a highly emotive one and naturally evokes strong passions on both the pro Choice and Pro Life sides. Arguments can get very heated and very personal, as I think your highly vivid sketch shows. Many people would agre with the tragic sentiments in your outline, but be careful to be objective as well and to show that you are empathetic to the plight of confused unsupported girls who find themselves in this predicament - after all some of them are little more than children themselves. Try to be balanced and sympathetic whilst clearly presenting your view of the truth in defending the defenceless. Well done!
If you are going to do that as your opener, balance it with an equally challenging version for a baby who wasn't aborted... like this
And he was dragged, kicking and screaming into a world he was too young to comprehend. At first, he didn't understand the poverty and the struggles and the depression. He didn't know about drug-dependency, how could he, he was just a baby. He didn't know that daddy's shouldn't come home once a month to punch mommy in the tummy. And he didn't remember the day he was taken away and passed from foster home to foster home. The long slow drift into the unwanted underclass. The anger. The ever-present knowledge of being unwanted. The fights and the perpetual unemployment. And while he found himself lost in a world that he had not be brought up for, unwanted, unsuccessful and unloved, and unable to love, he said to himself, 'mommy, how could you do this to me'