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I wrote something for school.Can you tell me what are the grammar mistakes?

    I consider that a trip to Greece should be an ideal place to spend your vacation.I really enjoy talking about the magic of this country,because a few years ago my family and I have visited Crete.There we have spended a wonderful time admiring the whole landscape,swimming,going shopping and so on.
     Nothing can be compared to the warming sun and the sandy beaches.I think there is no other place better then Greece.
Beside the beauty of this place you can choose to go hiking,tanning and you can also visit a lot of monuments.
      As a tourist of course you want to take photos and you look for the perfect shots.For this,Greece is the perfect place!If you take a photo in the first and last hours of the day,known as the "golden hours",the warm,rich lightning should help getting the best shots with amazing landscapes.
    The greek food can be also one of the reason for going there,because it tastes incredible and I can say  eating at a restaurant is not very expensive.
From my own experience,I really recommend you to visit this location,because it is a special one.


     Nowadays,the education subject is very debated by many qualified people,but there are a few measures that are taken to improve learning and teaching methods.Those people should be more interested in the importance of education,because it represents the key of development.
    First of all,to get a well-paid job you have to be smart enough and for this you need education.You can try studying on your own,but in school or college you learn a lot of other things.
   Beside being teached, you collaborate with your colleagues and teachers and this helps you discovering new skills and becoming more responsable.
I think education is not all about getting good marks or hardly studying all kinds of useless disciplines.It is a way to dicover new things that help us increasing our knowledge and abilities in general.
    An educated person has the ability to see the difference between good and evil or right and wrong.He/she is not limited and can understand everything better.
Education is also important in developement of a country in general.The society needs educated people as doctors,engineers,scientists,researchers so on.
In my opinion,nothing can be compared to education and I strongly believe that this is the way a man can evolve.

 

  I really need your help!



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pengirl | eNoter

Posted May 13, 2013 at 4:27 PM (Answer #1)

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Okay I'll try my best! (Bold is what I added/changed. Italicized is inproper grammer?)

I consider that a trip to Greece should (do you mean would?) be an ideal place to spend your vacation. I really enjoy talking about the magic of this country,< no comma because a few years ago my family and I have visited Crete. There we have spended spent a wonderful time admiring the whole entire landscape, swimming, going shopping and so on. Nothing can be compared to the warming sun and the sandy beaches.(use comma) I think there is no other place better then than Greece.
Besides the beauty of this place you can choose to go hiking, tanning and you can also visit a lot of monuments. As a tourist of course you want to take photos and you  look for the perfect shots. For this,<no comma Greece is the perfect place!If you take a photo in the first and last hours of the day,known as the "golden hours",the warm,<no comma add an and rich lightning should help getting the best shots with amazing landscapes. The greek food can be also be one of the reasons for going there, because it tastes incredible and I can say eating at a restaurant is not very expensive. From my own experience, <no comma I really recommend you to visit this location,<no comma because it is a special one.

Nowadays,<no comma the education subject is very debated by many qualified people,<no comma but there are a few measures that are taken to improve learning and teaching methods. Those people should be more interested in the importance of education,<no comma because it represents the key of development.
First of all, to get a well-paid job you have to be smart enough and for this you need an education. You can try studying on your own,<no comma but in school or college you learn a lot of other things. Beside being teached taught you collaborate with your colleagues and teachers and this helps you discoverring new skills and becomeing more responsable  responsible. I think education is not all about getting good marks or hardly(take out word? Does not make sense in sentence) studying all kinds of useless disciplines. It is a way to dicover new things that help us increaseing our knowledge and abilities in general. An educated person has the ability to see the difference between good and evil or right and wrong.<use comma he/she is not limited and can understand everything better. Education is also important in developement of a country in general.The society needs educated people as doctors, engineers, scientists, researchers and so on.
In my opinion, nothing can be compared to education and I strongly believe that this is the way a man (using society or humanity might strengthen your point instead of singluar? Not sure but man does not sound right to me..) can evolve.

 

Ok hope this helps and you've got some pretty strong points in your last paragraph! Just out of curiosity is English your first language?

-pengirl

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marinaart | Student | eNoter

Posted May 13, 2013 at 7:09 PM (Answer #2)

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Thank you very much!No,English is not my first language.

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pixelgera | High School Teacher | eNotes Newbie

Posted May 26, 2013 at 7:34 AM (Answer #3)

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  I consider that a trip to Greece would be an ideal place to spend one's  vacation.I really enjoy talking about the magic of this country,because a few years ago my family and I visited Crete.There we  spent a wonderful time admiring the landscape,swimming,going shopping and so on.
     Nothing can compare to the warm sun and the sandy beaches.I think there is no other place better than Greece.
Besides enjoying the beauty of this place one can choose to go hiking,tanning and also visit a lot of monuments.
      As a tourist of course you would want to take photos and you look for the perfect shots.For this,Greece is the perfect place!If you take a photo in the first and last hours of the day,known as the "golden hours",the warm,rich lighting  helps in getting the best shots of the amazing landscapes.
    The Greek food is also one of the reason for going there,because not only is the food  incredible  but also eating at a restaurant is not very expensive.
From my own experience,I really recommend you to visit this location,because it is a special one.

 

  Nowadays, although the education subject is much debated by many qualified people,  few measures are taken to improve learning and teaching methods. Educators should be more interested in the importance of education,because it represents the key to development.
    First of all,to get a well-paid job you have to be smart enough and for this you need education.You can try studying on your own,but in school or college you learn a lot of other things.
   Beside being taught, you collaborate with your colleagues and teachers and this helps you discover new skills and become more responsible.
I think education is not about getting good marks or studying all kinds of useless disciplines.It is a way to dicover new things that help us increase our knowledge and abilities in general.
    An educated person has the ability to see the difference between good and evil, right and wrong.He/she is not limited and can understand everything better.
Education is also important in the development of a country in general. Society needs educated people such  as doctors,engineers,scientists,researchers and so on.

In my opinion,nothing can be compared to education and I strongly believe that it is the way  man can evolve.

 I have made the changes . I hope this helps. good luck

 

   

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