Please read my poem and give constructive criticisim.
Hide and Seek
As he slips
away into the darkness
As he begins his hunt
Stealthily scurrying about in the shadows
Hunting down his prey one by one
With silence his ally always by his side
Whispering their hiding spots to him giving them away
And once they are all found a new game begins
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try putting some alliteration and metaphor or similes in there to spruce it up, like (hunting like a lion, catching it's prey one by one) should get you more marks. It's good though!
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